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On your back, moon glow falls upon your face. Your hair fanned out across the bed, eyes half closed, smile across your face. Giggle across your lips. You dont even know how beautiful I think you are.
Published 9th Feb 2011
| Edited 19th Feb 2011
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9th Feb 2011 3:12pm
This is going to sound REALLY sappy.. but that's really cute... and adorable.. i think!
9th Feb 2011 5:10pm
17th Feb 2011 6:02pm
like this. sappy is overly sentimental. this poem is sentimental but not
overly (IMHO) because it fits the subject, comes across as genuine, and
doesn't have too many gooey words (doubling up on gooey words would make
it sappy).
typos:
"hal fclosed" / "acroos"
19th Feb 2011 00:41am
