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The Triolet - War Incarnate.
Forged, I've out-lasted; standing before the Aftermath.
Glistening red, bloodied turban cloth flutters; caught wind.
Innocent outnumber guilty; only the innocent screamed.
Forged, I've outlasted; standing before the Aftermath.
I fought for a cause long lost; buried the corpses teemed.
I've burned it too, charred remains - the depth undreamed
Forged, I've out-lasted; standing before the Aftermath.
Glistening red, bloodied turban cloth flutters; caught wind.
Glistening red, bloodied turban cloth flutters; caught wind.
Innocent outnumber guilty; only the innocent screamed.
Forged, I've outlasted; standing before the Aftermath.
I fought for a cause long lost; buried the corpses teemed.
I've burned it too, charred remains - the depth undreamed
Forged, I've out-lasted; standing before the Aftermath.
Glistening red, bloodied turban cloth flutters; caught wind.
Published 16th Dec 2013
| Edited 17th Dec 2013
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Anonymous
17th Dec 2013 6:06pm
Great entry, and congrats on making it through. This is gonna be good!!!
20th Dec 2013 2:18pm
This is well-written, and although a technicality tripped you up, it was great seeing your writing skills in the comp.
Good work!
Good work!
28th Dec 2013 6:49pm
29th Dec 2013 00:57am
27th Apr 2014 2:10pm
This is one of my favorite forms of poetry, mostly because I think the refrains have the effect of driving thoughts home in a most poetical way.
first couple of lines make for a remarkable image, I got the feeling of an ancient battle, sabre and sweat, there's no remorse visible, which would indicate the thoughts of a warrior, I like the inclusion of turban cloth because it gives an authentic feel.
very enjoyable read, Tacete, good stuff man
first couple of lines make for a remarkable image, I got the feeling of an ancient battle, sabre and sweat, there's no remorse visible, which would indicate the thoughts of a warrior, I like the inclusion of turban cloth because it gives an authentic feel.
very enjoyable read, Tacete, good stuff man
An honour. Thank you for stopping by Eamon. I've always enjoyed more restrictive forms of poetry rather than free verse, I take to the challenge.
29th Apr 2014 1:18pm
