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The Blood Countess: Beauty is the Beast
Her alabaster skin turns translucent by night.
Her hair, ebony black, glistens in the moonlight
But only to deceive her unfortunate prey
Beneath a masquerade of ruffles and lace lurks evil
Twisted desires for youth eternal
To have drank blood and bathed in crimson
So was the fate of 600 virgins
She is The Blood Countess, The Lady of Cachtice
But cleverly disguised
The mark of the beast carved into her hands
Her hair, ebony black, glistens in the moonlight
But only to deceive her unfortunate prey
Beneath a masquerade of ruffles and lace lurks evil
Twisted desires for youth eternal
To have drank blood and bathed in crimson
So was the fate of 600 virgins
She is The Blood Countess, The Lady of Cachtice
But cleverly disguised
The mark of the beast carved into her hands
Published 5th Feb 2011
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5th Feb 2011 6:47am
5th Feb 2011 8:50am
the imagery is fantastic and you had me clinging onto the edge of my seat. bravo.
5th Feb 2011 5:42pm
Thank you. It's not my best, but it's been ages since I've been on this site and this story has always fascinated me
5th Feb 2011 5:48pm
5th Feb 2011 6:20pm
Did you ever read The Bloody Chamber by Angela Carter? It's got a story in it called The Lady of the House of Love which I think you'd really like judging from all those gothic ideas and colours you use in this...it's an inversion of the traditional view of the women in gothic novels being victims.
5th Feb 2011 6:35pm
This poem was based upon the true story of a Hungarian countess names Elizabeth Bathory. Thank you and I shall check it out :)
5th Feb 2011 6:47pm
Well, well, well, I wasn't sure I liked the piece if I'm honest purely for typical sort of Vampire-esque theme but damn, I feel educated, I mean sure you could have run with the full tale, the pressure of her husband being at war, then dying and I think longer would have made it better but from the point of using hard-based fact I like it!
5th Feb 2011 7:21pm
Thank you. I mainly posted this because I haven't written anything on this site since I first joined in November. I'm probably going to post a revised version of this poem.
1st Jul 2011 6:56pm
