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Not Good Enough
I wrote a poem
for you today
just as a million
poets have done
before this one
words of love
spilled onto paper
pain and joy
desire and fear
all for you,
but my love
just as a million
poets have done
before this one
I crumpled it up
and tossed it away.
for you today
just as a million
poets have done
before this one
words of love
spilled onto paper
pain and joy
desire and fear
all for you,
but my love
just as a million
poets have done
before this one
I crumpled it up
and tossed it away.
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Re: Not Good Enough
4th Dec 2013 1:15am
Freaking BRILLIANT!! Truly never saw that ending! Go on with your bad self bro! Loved this :)
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4th Dec 2013 1:31am
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Love it Hash! Sometimes those we toss away are the ones needing to be read and received...Xo
Felt this one...
Felt this one...
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4th Dec 2013 1:32am
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4th Dec 2013 1:46am
You should never throw them away because at times going back with a different perspective makes you realize that they were better than you thought!
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4th Dec 2013 2:42am
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Anonymous
4th Dec 2013 2:15am
And there she sits ... wondering why she never hears...
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4th Dec 2013 2:57pm
next time dont threw it away, what is not good enough for beloved can be good enough for us, your fellow-poets..)
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4th Dec 2013 9:10pm
The one for whom it was written
surely would have liked it ...
It's an awesome poem, Hash.
surely would have liked it ...
It's an awesome poem, Hash.
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4th Dec 2013 10:46pm
Yea Miss Chi,no one special...just a lonely heart sitting here with Hank Williams crying in my beer lol peace and thank you always :)
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4th Dec 2013 9:27pm
I am a huge fan of love poems, so I went for this in a big way. You did a fine job with the tone of this poem, the hopefulness, the fear of rejection.
I missed the punctuation, but no big deal. Very fine writing.
Heart
I missed the punctuation, but no big deal. Very fine writing.
Heart
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4th Dec 2013 10:49pm
Thanks hollyrene,you make me smile :)...sometimes i like to leave all the marks out,cause to tell the truth never know where to put them (peace and love to you)
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4th Dec 2013 11:05pm
excellence and a loving smile Here Hash...I think many Writes look better without those pesky eyelashes and such...plus lets a reader pause where they feel is right for their particular rhythm...always the goods Sir!!!
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