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A dream of autumn
Leaves fall down off the trees
Green,red and brown background
It makes an amazing autumn painting
Weather pouring down with rain
Washing the tears from my face
Days get shorter and nights longer
And I feel alone in my soul
Because you are not there
To hug me strong and whisper in my ear
The promise your heart will keep mine warm
But it's just an autumn dream
Which will disappear like every year
When you did not appeared in the autumn season
Just a breeze with scent of chrysanthemums
Touch my face and provoke me a smile
And makes me forget that I miss you much
Green,red and brown background
It makes an amazing autumn painting
Weather pouring down with rain
Washing the tears from my face
Days get shorter and nights longer
And I feel alone in my soul
Because you are not there
To hug me strong and whisper in my ear
The promise your heart will keep mine warm
But it's just an autumn dream
Which will disappear like every year
When you did not appeared in the autumn season
Just a breeze with scent of chrysanthemums
Touch my face and provoke me a smile
And makes me forget that I miss you much
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Re: A dream of autumn
6th Nov 2013 1:28am
So romantic poem, a little sad, but in vibration with the season, wery well write, Gabi, I love it!
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Re: A dream of autumn
I like it, but oddly, it sounds like 2 of my poems combined? :/
Yours:
"Leaves fall down off the trees
Green,red and brown.
Weather pouring down with rain".... Same topic, "rain = wet"
My poem- 'Gloomy Autumn Day':
"Such a wet October day" ....again, same topic like I mentioned. "Rain = Wet"
"Orange, yellow, and red
floating from the trees."
And my poem 'Lonely Soul':
Yours:
"I feel alone in my soul
Days get shorter and nights longer.
Because you are not here
To hug me strong and whisper in my ear"
Mine:
"Every night I dream of you, whispering in my ear.
Alone, I sit on the shoreline
Staring out to the sea
Waiting for you.
I wait all night till dawn, but you never appear,
It seems as though we're just too far apart."
Do you see the similarities between your poem and my two?
I'm sorry but I just wanted to point this out to you because I see my two poems in yours for some reason :/
Yours:
"Leaves fall down off the trees
Green,red and brown.
Weather pouring down with rain".... Same topic, "rain = wet"
My poem- 'Gloomy Autumn Day':
"Such a wet October day" ....again, same topic like I mentioned. "Rain = Wet"
"Orange, yellow, and red
floating from the trees."
And my poem 'Lonely Soul':
Yours:
"I feel alone in my soul
Days get shorter and nights longer.
Because you are not here
To hug me strong and whisper in my ear"
Mine:
"Every night I dream of you, whispering in my ear.
Alone, I sit on the shoreline
Staring out to the sea
Waiting for you.
I wait all night till dawn, but you never appear,
It seems as though we're just too far apart."
Do you see the similarities between your poem and my two?
I'm sorry but I just wanted to point this out to you because I see my two poems in yours for some reason :/
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re: Re: A dream of autumn
6th Nov 2013 2:22am
Are you serious?
It is funny to expose such comparisons of poems. Obviously, poems about the same subject use similar words. The most funny is "wet" and "rain" : "Such a wet October day" and "Weather pouring down with rain"!!! Yes rain is wet! and we are wet under the rain! But a plagia????
Other comparison where I laugh is the colors of automn... Yes, it is not a secret, automn has for poets and painters such colors... Depends of the country, the trees...
DreamerSeeker, tell us, you are not serious, just a joke to Gabi?
Just a last word : the most important poets had often found inspiration by reading other poetry! As in paint (most known were Picasso and Brake), in music (most known were J.S. Bach and A. Vivaldi)...
It is funny to expose such comparisons of poems. Obviously, poems about the same subject use similar words. The most funny is "wet" and "rain" : "Such a wet October day" and "Weather pouring down with rain"!!! Yes rain is wet! and we are wet under the rain! But a plagia????
Other comparison where I laugh is the colors of automn... Yes, it is not a secret, automn has for poets and painters such colors... Depends of the country, the trees...
DreamerSeeker, tell us, you are not serious, just a joke to Gabi?
Just a last word : the most important poets had often found inspiration by reading other poetry! As in paint (most known were Picasso and Brake), in music (most known were J.S. Bach and A. Vivaldi)...
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re: Re: A dream of autumn
OMG,i can't believe this,i am totally shocked...Dreamer i can't believe what you wrote!!!I did not expected at this from you.A dream of autum is a poem about my life,in this poem i wrote my own feelings,about me and about someone very special in my life which is very far.I never thought my own feelings could be interperted in wrong way by you Dreamer,i am really sad.I am in this site to write poems by my own feelings,happenings,my sadness and my happiness,i am not here to copy other poets especially you Dreamer. Yes, same subject in our poems but they are very different.The human feelings are same,we all love,suffer etc... And when we write our feelings on paper they could be similar,if that makes sense to you Dreamer.Again Dreamer i did not copied your poem. And,if i decide one day to copy some poets,i will copy famous poets from which i have really to learn something.
Re: A dream of autumn
6th Nov 2013 2:59am
I'm sorry I'm just curious because to me it sounds very similar. I don't mean much by it, I'm not accusing Gabi of copying or anything.
I'm very protective of my poems as you may have noticed. I get nervous about my poems being similar. But I promise I'm not mad and I promise I don't mean the comment in a bad way.
I'm very protective of my poems as you may have noticed. I get nervous about my poems being similar. But I promise I'm not mad and I promise I don't mean the comment in a bad way.
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