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I've noticed...
20th Jan 2011 11:35am
your fascination with water-- and it's always as if there's a division in you (maybe a love-hate sorta thing?) like this one... I can't explain it in words but you sure were able to sent that conflicting emotion... I like this, doll! :)
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re: I've noticed...
20th Jan 2011 11:58am
that made me so happy, that you noticed my relationship with water; we've always kinda had a 'thing' for each other i think, but yeah, love and a respect more than hate. its power is undeniable. i draw on the elements in general, but i don't think of them that way: as elements. they just seem to embody what life feels like to me. thanks so much, i'm glad you like it. [:
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2011 1:12pm
"Life sustaining/suffocation." I love that line. This is a marvellous cinquain. I've always been fascinated by the Asian taste for the minature, in body and art and whatever else, and these poetic forms, haiku and cinquain and so foth, are perfect examples of it.
Your cinquain is charming and sinister all at once, a little glimpse inside the dark twisted kitty that is Jestalessa. :P
Your cinquain is charming and sinister all at once, a little glimpse inside the dark twisted kitty that is Jestalessa. :P

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20th Jan 2011 1:48pm
ooo! thank you, Jack! you're quite the inspiration, and i'm so glad you liked those lines, i was hoping they wouldn't confuse people.
*haha* twisted kitty, indeed! why do i feel flattered by that? ;]
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2011 7:04pm
I'll chime with Jack here also, I too love minimalism and all things 'minature'...less is often more - esp with the written word.

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fluid ..
Anonymous
20th Jan 2011 2:08pm
Great structure and an intriguing poetic twist..
Good work,
S
Good work,
S

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re: fluid ..
20th Jan 2011 3:31pm
thank you! i'm pleased you enjoyed it. it was for the Cinquain challenge in the forums. [:
re: hummm
8th Feb 2011 9:43am
either way, i'll take a look, only because you took the time to comment....on everything! :D