Silver Blurs

You are a fish.....

You're a wonder.

Mysterious turtle...

Thank you, Gabriel...

;)

i like how you portray the place you reside as somewhere far out and reality is the slip or the visit and especially that the step forward is "erroneous". love that word and i'm glad it is not used that often but well placed here.
i could be completely off the wall here but.....

i dig it miss A.

keep on keepin on....

Johnrot your eye is sharp. That is the heart of the poem, the rest is window dressing.

Thank you!

Atakti Gabriel picked out my favorite lines.. all in all a very captivating write!!! peace Crim

Thank you, Crim! Something is drawing the reader there, and the writer too...

:)

My first thought was an aquarium with one of those little caves for the fish to hide; aerator as the air bursts.

My father had an aquarium that took up an entire wall... it was a wonderful place to go and be hynotized...

Well, someone let the catfish out of the bag *cough, turtle, cough*

But yeah, there is something hypotic about air bubbles...

Thanks for commenting, Petit.

:)

One day we will all disappear in the silver blur and that's when we will relinquish all retreats.
But for now we can steal moments to escape there.
Short but with very clear imagery, very nice!

Too true, Vee, too true. I may have to revisit this work and look around this reality some more.

Thank you.

Beautiful,Atakti! it is like the end goes back to the beginning, a circle of steadiness, almost like a rolling wave going back and forth...

*grin* waves will catch my attention, and yours, Mourganna!

Thank you for the lovely comment.

You rock momma xoxo

So do you, mah sweet Gigi!

:)

This is Silver Cool!!!  
 
I read this again today and I have the opposite interpretation... you've got the hots for TRON!!!
 
Awesome poem, Atakti. I love the imagery of the murk sand and alien dimensions... have you read House of Leaves? You got me thinking about it.
 
Stupendous simplicity with so much depth, you make me sick.

Tron... You high on paint fumes?

House of Leaves - I looked it up, and it sounds like a book I should read. So thanks? Unless this is a book about confusion - aha!

Well, thanks for stopping by, and here's a bucket...

I like it :D

HAL

Many thanks, HAL, glad you do.