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Someone save me
Kill me, i need to die. It hurts to live a life full of lies. Holding tight to all the fails, praying it don’t brake on me. Im bleeding slowly on the inside hoping one day to be free from all these lies. Is it just a dream, is it all in my head. Help me! Help me! Somebody! I cant take this insanity any more. Help me, help me! Because... Im slowly dying on this floor. Under all these lies im drowning on my own blood inside. Save me save me! I cant take it anymore. Kill me! Im dying, dying, dying. Dose anyone hear me? Please... Save me
Published 12th Oct 2013
| Edited 14th Jan 2015
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12th Oct 2013 5:22am
I can totally feel you.
Now, as a fellow poet I would like to comment on your poem.
First of all, write the poem in stanzas since it'll be easier to read like that and secondly,it'll help if you work on the spellings and the grammar.
Otherwise, nice work in expressing :)
Now, as a fellow poet I would like to comment on your poem.
First of all, write the poem in stanzas since it'll be easier to read like that and secondly,it'll help if you work on the spellings and the grammar.
Otherwise, nice work in expressing :)
18th Oct 2013 6:47am
Thanks. An yeah my grammer an all suck but thank you im glad you liked. An thanks idk it easer that way. -smiles-
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