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Stealing cigarettes
After I thought it through
the stigma felt abused
I cycled through the minds of others
exposing their consensus to my senses
for better or worse, I don't discriminate
I do, however, hate
without a second thought
suddenly, void of reason
in passing or in wait I would
indifferently abuse the scarred stature
what remained was waste
letting me think is a sin
there is no god who can forgive my mind
not that I condone the plundering of others
it's just that my father will never know.
the stigma felt abused
I cycled through the minds of others
exposing their consensus to my senses
for better or worse, I don't discriminate
I do, however, hate
without a second thought
suddenly, void of reason
in passing or in wait I would
indifferently abuse the scarred stature
what remained was waste
letting me think is a sin
there is no god who can forgive my mind
not that I condone the plundering of others
it's just that my father will never know.
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Re: Stealing cigarettes
3rd Oct 2013 3:11pm
Very self aware, and effectively naive through the justification we make when transgressing in youth. Good write
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re: Re: Stealing cigarettes
3rd Oct 2013 9:36pm
thank you for that... I always learn more about my work after I've written it.
from you guys.
from you guys.
Re: Stealing cigarettes
3rd Oct 2013 4:26pm
Look at the poet in you, Dennis! I see ya! This was damn good; stealing cigarettes and shit, poetically! :)
"exposing their consensus to my senses
for better or worse, I don't discriminate"<-love!
"exposing their consensus to my senses
for better or worse, I don't discriminate"<-love!
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re: Re: Stealing cigarettes
3rd Oct 2013 9:37pm
it's merely an excuse for not tightening the butt cheeks at the right time.
this isn't poetry love... I'm whining :P
thank you so much!
this isn't poetry love... I'm whining :P
thank you so much!
re: re: Re: Stealing cigarettes
3rd Oct 2013 10:58pm
^^^^LMAO! I just tighten my butt cheeks after reading this! O.o. I admit it, I have issues....
Keep whining, you're good at it..Xo
Keep whining, you're good at it..Xo
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Re: Stealing cigarettes
3rd Oct 2013 8:46pm
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Re: Stealing cigarettes
4th Oct 2013 6:30am
thumbs up to ur expressions in those three stanzas..ignoring the theme for a moment, in commonality, have always wondered how our complex contemplating quick mind works in twists n turns taking various options & emotions of self n others...& how you have captured in ur lang here, uncompromisingly would I say?
just v.good work. keeping sharing ur world more:
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5th Oct 2013 11:16am
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5th Oct 2013 11:18am
Re: Stealing cigarettes
5th Oct 2013 10:16pm
S3 was beautiful. Your writing is gaining more and more emotional depth and developing over time. You're truly remarkable, fantastic work.
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re: Re: Stealing cigarettes
10th Oct 2013 9:37am
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Anonymous
6th Oct 2013 00:55am
You demonstrate in this poem that you are an intelligent, talented and complex individual.
Write on!
Kitty
Write on!
Kitty
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re: Re: Stealing cigarettes
10th Oct 2013 9:38am
Re: Stealing cigarettes
6th Oct 2013 7:00am
Interesting take on the subject. I never stole cigarettes I think, but I can relate to the feeling.
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10th Oct 2013 9:39am
Re: Stealing cigarettes
7th Oct 2013 1:43pm
This line has stuck with me..read this poem when you first posted...and again now...
"there is no god who can forgive my mind
not that I condone the plundering of others
it's just that my father will never know."
Whether it's whining or more--I think this is a very raw and open line here!
"there is no god who can forgive my mind
not that I condone the plundering of others
it's just that my father will never know."
Whether it's whining or more--I think this is a very raw and open line here!
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re: Re: Stealing cigarettes
10th Oct 2013 9:40am
Re: Stealing cigarettes
10th Oct 2013 11:02am
this is a great piece of work man.. the first stanza is my favorite it got me excited .. very well done 13..
cyanide..
cyanide..
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Re: Stealing cigarettes
13th Oct 2013 9:17pm
the sense of your regret n the thought of asking yourself to get into others shoes to check yourself out..that entire idea that u displayed in the first stanza got me into it or 'excited' ..
a great piece .. good job my friend once again..l
a great piece .. good job my friend once again..l
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re: Re: Stealing cigarettes
14th Oct 2013 9:39am
Re: Stealing cigarettes
14th Oct 2013 11:18am
If stealing cigarettes make you write this I am ready to gift you a pack each day :P :P lol.
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15th Oct 2013 9:35am