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You Seriously, Can't Be Serious,,,,,
Don't make me laugh,
I want all of you,
not only half.
You gotta be,
shitting me.
Do I look dumb
to you?
Do you think you're
soo fucking smart?
Here's the 'finger',
for your delusions.
Stick it up where the sun,
doesn't give radiation.
Your sick in your mind,
and probably have shit
for brains.
I'm not your slave,
you idiot.
Tie yourself with your
own chain.
Oh you forgot,
the location of the keys.
That's not my problem,
you see.
You aren't the first.
You aren't the last.
So do me a big favor,
and take your head out
your ass.
I confessed
something,
that I truly felt.
You laughed,
and asked if I would mind...
share?
You are just a complete idiot.
I'm more in disbelief,
than furious.
I would have never thought you'd
say some thing like that!!
You seriously, couldn't be serious...
I want all of you,
not only half.
You gotta be,
shitting me.
Do I look dumb
to you?
Do you think you're
soo fucking smart?
Here's the 'finger',
for your delusions.
Stick it up where the sun,
doesn't give radiation.
Your sick in your mind,
and probably have shit
for brains.
I'm not your slave,
you idiot.
Tie yourself with your
own chain.
Oh you forgot,
the location of the keys.
That's not my problem,
you see.
You aren't the first.
You aren't the last.
So do me a big favor,
and take your head out
your ass.
I confessed
something,
that I truly felt.
You laughed,
and asked if I would mind...
share?
You are just a complete idiot.
I'm more in disbelief,
than furious.
I would have never thought you'd
say some thing like that!!
You seriously, couldn't be serious...
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Re: You Seriously, Can't Be Serious,,,,,
28th Sep 2013 1:13am
Heck yes. I love this a lot of people need to do what you write.
And its so turthfull. I can honestly saw I could feel what you felt while reading you work.
And its so turthfull. I can honestly saw I could feel what you felt while reading you work.
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28th Sep 2013 9:25am
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28th Sep 2013 6:34am
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28th Sep 2013 9:28am
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29th Sep 2013 1:19am
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29th Sep 2013 00:15am
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29th Sep 2013 1:19am
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29th Sep 2013 00:23am
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29th Sep 2013 1:19am
Re: You Seriously, Can't Be Serious,,,,,
29th Sep 2013 4:36am
Brutal rant girl. I could def get into it. I've been there and you wrote it with the perfect emotions to back up that balsy title. Write on,
Here's the 'finger',
for your delusions.
Stick it up where the sun,
doesn't give radiation.
I thought that was great.
Here's the 'finger',
for your delusions.
Stick it up where the sun,
doesn't give radiation.
I thought that was great.
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re: Re: You Seriously, Can't Be Serious,,,,,
29th Sep 2013 4:55am
lmao... Thanks!
I was trying not to be too balsy. jeje...
I glad you like it!
XD
I was trying not to be too balsy. jeje...
I glad you like it!
XD
Re: You Seriously, Can't Be Serious,,,,,
29th Sep 2013 4:44am
Not to offend but the venom in this write reminded me of, believe it or not, the Monkees singing "I'm Not Your Stepping Stone".
There is real, direct, face to face feel here that gives this write a sense of authenticity.
There is real, direct, face to face feel here that gives this write a sense of authenticity.
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re: Re: You Seriously, Can't Be Serious,,,,,
29th Sep 2013 4:56am
Offense not taken...
and I like that song!!
lol.
Thank you JazzManor
and I like that song!!
lol.
Thank you JazzManor
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29th Sep 2013 5:02am
Re: You Seriously, Can't Be Serious,,,,,
29th Sep 2013 7:21am
i didn't feel I was reading it I thought u were just saying those words in a rhythmic form..that's rare not many can do it. so congratulation on that..
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30th Sep 2013 9:08am