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Come to me
My heart flutters
like sparrows
with no place to land.
Come to me
and give it a rest
in the palm
of your hand.
like sparrows
with no place to land.
Come to me
and give it a rest
in the palm
of your hand.
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22nd Sep 2013 5:41pm
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Anonymous
22nd Sep 2013 6:07pm
Beautiful lines of seeking and finding comfort, Very nice Ms. Chi.

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re: Re: Come to me
22nd Sep 2013 6:37pm
Thanks, Vee, always appreciate your kind comments. As to the finding, we'll see :-).
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22nd Sep 2013 6:58pm
Aaaawwww super sweet n beautiful ink my friend
what a dreamy piece of writing :)
what a dreamy piece of writing :)
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22nd Sep 2013 7:24pm
this is a very pretty scene, all floating birds & flowers & a large amount of love...
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re: Re: Come to me
22nd Sep 2013 8:02pm
You're right, I should have plaited flowers into my poem. But I better give them to you because of your sweet comment!xo
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Anonymous
22nd Sep 2013 9:12pm
This is a very peaceful image, I was most fascinated by the last words...."in the palm of your hands"...I was thinking that actually we have much in the palm of our hands, even without knowing...Thank you for sharing, Chi!

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re: Re: Come to me
23rd Sep 2013 10:18am
Such a thoughtful comment, Liz, I always appreciate it! Glad that little poem provoked some thinking about what we have in our hands to tend to or even to crush without intent. Thank you for reading!
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Anonymous
23rd Sep 2013 5:38pm
Chi,
A beautiful visual for the mind...I feel them in your chest through the palm of my hand as I offer a finger for them to perch on...
Enjoyed!!!
tornado
A beautiful visual for the mind...I feel them in your chest through the palm of my hand as I offer a finger for them to perch on...
Enjoyed!!!
tornado

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re: Re: Come to me
23rd Sep 2013 7:18pm
Oh, I love that line "as I offer a finger for them to perch on". Thank you, tornado, for this really sweet comment!
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2013 10:04am
Beautiful imagery, Iris. Imaginative, lovely work. Enjoyed the read very much!! :-)
Peace
Carlene
Peace
Carlene

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