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Toned Down Zane
Up against the wall you know I couldn't wait
one word comes to mind
insatiate
Pin you fiercely no room to wiggle
but rather than distraught there is a faint
giggle
Angle you with friction what is that I hear
if measurement is needed this is a supersonic
gear
For I put it on you like a lion on the chase
did you really have no inkling when we got back to your
place
Even thought all night long you had a teasing attack
cooed and whispered suggestions so until my intentions had a one way
track
We hit the door and the fury ragged strong
not to be complete until that crack of
dawn
Tour of the bodies and a tour of the estate
a novel of endless chapters that will be our
fate
Culminated in the final erotic battle two bodies in aroused states
the saturation and watering of the secret garden beyond your
gate
one word comes to mind
insatiate
Pin you fiercely no room to wiggle
but rather than distraught there is a faint
giggle
Angle you with friction what is that I hear
if measurement is needed this is a supersonic
gear
For I put it on you like a lion on the chase
did you really have no inkling when we got back to your
place
Even thought all night long you had a teasing attack
cooed and whispered suggestions so until my intentions had a one way
track
We hit the door and the fury ragged strong
not to be complete until that crack of
dawn
Tour of the bodies and a tour of the estate
a novel of endless chapters that will be our
fate
Culminated in the final erotic battle two bodies in aroused states
the saturation and watering of the secret garden beyond your
gate
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Re: Toned Down Zane
Toned Down Zane?! What made you title this? I'm curious.
Pretty Hot read! Some cleverly lines in there! Xo
Pretty Hot read! Some cleverly lines in there! Xo
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18th Sep 2013 3:39am
I remembered I couldn't sleep one night. I am in the remodeled guest house; my brother and his wife are in the main house. Unaware to me, they expanded our cable plan. Never asked why, just assumed that it was at least partially because my brother is a basketball coach and wanted access to more games. At any rate, I put on the tv and was intrigued by the Zane Chronicles. The plot seemed decent and it was nice to see a multi-racial cast. (All the other adult programs appear to have very little color with the exception of an Asian female here and there)
So there you have the inspiration.
So there you have the inspiration.
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18th Sep 2013 3:43am
Rain loves her some Zane Chronicles! Thanks for the explanation luv....
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18th Sep 2013 4:39am
Funny you should say that...there is at least one character who I think is much like you.
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Anonymous
18th Sep 2013 3:31am
No idea about the title,but damn, man - great stuff...!!

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re: Re: Toned Down Zane
Thanks--- I felt the need to move away from the more traditional structure I use.
Zane's Sex Chronicles was an "After Dark" program shown on Cinemax that was based on a collection of short stories. The first series focused on the lives of 4 female friends. The second series was taken from the short stories, Zane's The Jump Off", follows 5 fraternity brothers.
Zane's Sex Chronicles was an "After Dark" program shown on Cinemax that was based on a collection of short stories. The first series focused on the lives of 4 female friends. The second series was taken from the short stories, Zane's The Jump Off", follows 5 fraternity brothers.
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Anonymous
18th Sep 2013 3:16pm
nice flow jazz
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Re: Toned Down Zane
18th Sep 2013 8:04pm
Gonna have to see if I can find the chronicles on netflix..becaue if that is "toned" down..well ehhhhem (clearing throat)...yeah... :)
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re: Re: Toned Down Zane
18th Sep 2013 10:29pm
you could also do some reading. http://www.amazon.com/Zanes-Chronicles-collection-short-stories/dp/0739498789
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20th Sep 2013 9:19pm
I see I need Cinemax now...got Me interested with this Steamy Write-Excellence!!!
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