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Pure
A hypnotic pull into fragments
of azure which have swallowed light
empties the chatter from your mind.
Tiny shocks of bright fail to upstage
a cool hue that once dreamt of Arctic
waters. You quench your eyes within
these wells of primary power,
these crystals that bestow stillness.
Published 16th Sep 2013
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16th Sep 2013 7:40pm
For those that know the source of my inspiration, shhhhh.
At least you can tell me if I caught it in words...
:)
At least you can tell me if I caught it in words...
:)
Anonymous
16th Sep 2013 8:47pm
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17th Sep 2013 2:59am
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17th Sep 2013 3:01am
You were close in your guess, but I've PMed back the answer. Anyone else who really wants to know, ask Dystopian...
Kidding! PM me, I'll clue you in.
*grin*
Kidding! PM me, I'll clue you in.
*grin*
Anonymous
16th Sep 2013 10:03pm
Thinking.....nice one Ataki!
17th Sep 2013 3:02am
Anonymous
17th Sep 2013 00:46am
Nice! I think I know too.....the origins clued me in! Fun and fascinating! Mike.
17th Sep 2013 3:03am
17th Sep 2013 1:18am
I ken not your inspiration for this remarkable piece, but it's vivid imagery is breath-taking...
beautifully "Pure", Atakti!
beautifully "Pure", Atakti!
17th Sep 2013 3:04am
17th Sep 2013 7:29am
Atakti this is a beautiful write.. though I only had one in mind for the inspiration though i'm probably wrong and out of touch.. peace Crim
18th Sep 2013 5:36am
Hello Crim, good to see you here.
Thank you, and your guess might be right, you never know...
Thank you, and your guess might be right, you never know...
wow... You did a miraculous job, now this is pretty... well done Atakti!
Your opening line is fascinating in itself...
"A hypnotic pull into fragments" and the rest of the piece does just that.
Very fond of this piece I am.
Special
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Your opening line is fascinating in itself...
"A hypnotic pull into fragments" and the rest of the piece does just that.
Very fond of this piece I am.
Special
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18th Sep 2013 5:37am
17th Sep 2013 6:00pm
Azure is such a beautiful word, which you have matched with this cool piece of pure poetry. :)
18th Sep 2013 5:39am
It's one of my fav words, it holds much. Thank you, Case, for the comments and list add, means a lot. Perhaps this read will keep you cool this summer...
17th Sep 2013 6:12pm
Such wonderful imagery and breathtaking beauty here Atakti.
You have captured the essence of your inspiration so well.
(Yes I saw it) :)
You have captured the essence of your inspiration so well.
(Yes I saw it) :)
18th Sep 2013 5:40am
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18th Sep 2013 8:46pm
i don't wanna know . i like it jus the way it is miss atakti. leaving something for the reader to ponder is half the fun here...
i def dig the language and delivery here mam....
i def dig the language and delivery here mam....
19th Sep 2013 6:57am
19th Sep 2013 2:42pm
I know not the inspiration, but it doesn't matter
Becuz when I read ur work, the intensity of the imagery makes my mind splatter lol
In other words...ur freaking aaahhh mazing! :)
Becuz when I read ur work, the intensity of the imagery makes my mind splatter lol
In other words...ur freaking aaahhh mazing! :)
Anonymous
20th Sep 2013 3:35am
Powerful imagery. I love the first line in second stanza..well done!
