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rotted fever ..
i
the meth head
pen fed
scroll lullabies in
stained ink
i
hear the demons humming
ohhh im coming
soon
to see you through
the ballad of blue skies
weary eyes
for all the times you
soothed my sighs
in
rotted fever
a true believer
dope hope
sing in notes of
painful pleasure
i crave
the lonesome letters
unforgiving
key kept clever
i want the love
of a troubled soul
to love me back
til we grow old
so we can die
and die
then die again.
for Jon Rot
Published 13th Sep 2013
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13th Sep 2013 7:14pm
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13th Sep 2013 9:13pm
14th Sep 2013 6:29pm
i think i'm too flattered to leave an un biased comment here dev.
but it's very clever and i def dig it.
thank you mam......
but it's very clever and i def dig it.
thank you mam......
reads like a malaria induced love note
that is a compliment... infact im blown away by the vulnerability.
it's intense but it has a wistful edge.
that is a compliment... infact im blown away by the vulnerability.
it's intense but it has a wistful edge.
Anonymous
15th Sep 2013 9:52am
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15th Sep 2013 11:44am
Gee i wonder. lol. thank you for helping me see where my weaknesses and strengths were. still got a lot to learn but i take your critique in stride ..
Anonymous
15th Sep 2013 1:38pm
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20th Sep 2013 6:49am
Mistress this is a beautifully dark love letter so deliously written.. I've missed you so much I dreamt of you last night.. masterful inking Mistress much love Crim
22nd Oct 2013 3:46am
28th Oct 2013 5:40pm
well nice write indeed .. but try to make the i's capital,
I mean 'I'.
I don't know if u had done that purposely to sound casual and show ur raw feelings but it sounded a bit informal to me ..
but if u ignore it , the whole thing was a nice piece
don't be offended I'm just a wannabe..
keep writing ..
cyanide
I mean 'I'.
I don't know if u had done that purposely to sound casual and show ur raw feelings but it sounded a bit informal to me ..
but if u ignore it , the whole thing was a nice piece
don't be offended I'm just a wannabe..
keep writing ..
cyanide
