Weekend eve

Lovely, it seems that time has stood still in this magical place.

You are right time stands still in this part of Shropshire.Thankyou for calling Vee

Almost like you have written about the village I live in myself, the west coast of Norway has a lot of green fields too, they arent flat more like glowing hills, and there are many sheep and goat farms here too, lovely write, Kexby!

Thankyou LIZQ This is south Shropshire, gentle folding hills.The land is poor so the main crop is sheep winberries and heather. There is litle chance it will be changed.The lead and silver were taken by the Romans.I wrote about this in my poem The Jigsaw.
 
 I have cut down the punctuations to the full stop. It seems to work.  

blimey  i can picture the scene
beautifully worded Mr. Kexby

I am glad you could picture the scene there is a calm eroticism about this place. There appears to be no time here Nature is all around watching you,saying nothing one can understand save for ' welcome stranger goodbye'

I love the classical language here, your use of it is by no means overplayed. definitely poetic in terms of how I would perceive poetry, and certainly what I'd be aspiring to write like.

"midst bracken-brown and heather  
winberry fruits and rabbits  
silent blue and clouds"     <- I thought that, among others, these lines were really good  


in terms of any suggestions, the only thing that sprang to mind was that I thought a coma after dog on the 12th and after go on the 13th would improve the respective lines, certainly on the 13th anyway


either way, I'm very happy I ventured into your realm.  good stuff        

 CraicDealer thanks for calling

I have been experimenting with punctuation This poem has no commas. 'whisper as we go (,) do not disturb' yes you are correct . . .more so than after dog . . . .lets omit the comma at dog ,but add the other at 'as we go'

I write quickly  almost as fast as the poem will be read reciting as I write ,intending that my poetry will be read out-loud. My punctuation is not purely grammatical. I am a singer of plainsong and Gregorian chant,tending to use the punctuation as breathing instructions phrases capable of being read comfortably in a single breath.

Thankyou for your time