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What I Want
Bind my hands
Tie me to the bed
Lay me there at your mercy
With all the thoughts in your head
I'm a little freak
Or maybe just lazy
But I love it when you tease me
The way your touch drives me crazy
Kiss my lips
Gently caress my skin
Tell everything you desire to do
I'll be so far gone I have let you in
Drive me insane
You have a price to pay
Baby please don't leave me like this
The burning inside me won't go away
I need you inside
Tell me you won't stop
Until my legs are wobbly and shaking
I can't take anymore, my time is up
Tie me to the bed
Lay me there at your mercy
With all the thoughts in your head
I'm a little freak
Or maybe just lazy
But I love it when you tease me
The way your touch drives me crazy
Kiss my lips
Gently caress my skin
Tell everything you desire to do
I'll be so far gone I have let you in
Drive me insane
You have a price to pay
Baby please don't leave me like this
The burning inside me won't go away
I need you inside
Tell me you won't stop
Until my legs are wobbly and shaking
I can't take anymore, my time is up
Published 9th Sep 2013
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9th Sep 2013 2:02pm
I liked it. I took it as being honest and youthfully direct(hope you're not bull-shitting.)
But the last two stanzas got a bit straggly should be tighter like the first two. Also, grammar isn't all but it does impact. Do yourself justice, be sure you're submitting your best effort.
But the last two stanzas got a bit straggly should be tighter like the first two. Also, grammar isn't all but it does impact. Do yourself justice, be sure you're submitting your best effort.
