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If She Would Write with Me
I.
Freedom is a fragile thing
that often comes and goes
with every broken promise of
the truths that no one knows.
A.
She says that she can hardly wait
and it will be so thrilling;
oh, my God, can she deliver,
and she'll be so willing.
B.
That's what she says,
but then the moment
and the pen raised
poised like a seahorse
on the tip
of Neptune's finger,
and then,
with a flick
of her wrist,
she signs off,
and the exercise
is over.
C.
This is what it's like
to say
that she will write
the depth
of her emotions
in a single solid line,
and yet when it comes time
to lay down ink,
her knees buckle
and the dry lipped nip
crushes down
and splits the parchment
since despair
has borrowed her again.
D.
She does not have
a drop
of crimson agony
developed
and having not taken the time
to draw her sense
of reciprocity,
she cannot create
the needed context
in her mind
to justify the speaking
of the verses
that might have told
the glories
of her heart.
E.
Had she stirred
the basic pot
and watered in
that ragged edge,
and crushed the ink
into the stone,
she might have felt
the needed love
to flow a scent
of blackened blood
through which dissolves
the depths
of spirit's union.
F.
And then too
I might have said
the needed lines
that tell her all along
that she was in my heart.
II.
So, freedom is a fragile thing
that often comes and goes
with every broken promise of
the truths that no one knows.
runningturtle87
Freedom is a fragile thing
that often comes and goes
with every broken promise of
the truths that no one knows.
A.
She says that she can hardly wait
and it will be so thrilling;
oh, my God, can she deliver,
and she'll be so willing.
B.
That's what she says,
but then the moment
and the pen raised
poised like a seahorse
on the tip
of Neptune's finger,
and then,
with a flick
of her wrist,
she signs off,
and the exercise
is over.
C.
This is what it's like
to say
that she will write
the depth
of her emotions
in a single solid line,
and yet when it comes time
to lay down ink,
her knees buckle
and the dry lipped nip
crushes down
and splits the parchment
since despair
has borrowed her again.
D.
She does not have
a drop
of crimson agony
developed
and having not taken the time
to draw her sense
of reciprocity,
she cannot create
the needed context
in her mind
to justify the speaking
of the verses
that might have told
the glories
of her heart.
E.
Had she stirred
the basic pot
and watered in
that ragged edge,
and crushed the ink
into the stone,
she might have felt
the needed love
to flow a scent
of blackened blood
through which dissolves
the depths
of spirit's union.
F.
And then too
I might have said
the needed lines
that tell her all along
that she was in my heart.
II.
So, freedom is a fragile thing
that often comes and goes
with every broken promise of
the truths that no one knows.
runningturtle87
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Re: If She Would Write with Me
28th Aug 2013 9:46am
"she cannot create
the needed context
in her mind
to justify the speaking
of the verses
that might have told
the glories
of her heart"
Beautiful insight, turtle. Not many can handle freedom.
the needed context
in her mind
to justify the speaking
of the verses
that might have told
the glories
of her heart"
Beautiful insight, turtle. Not many can handle freedom.
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28th Aug 2013 9:53am
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28th Aug 2013 10:02am
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28th Aug 2013 10:39am
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28th Aug 2013 10:57am
Thanks...trying to get at that over-analyzation we all go through in trying to write non-self-conscious erotica, which is meant to disclose our inner-awarenesses and yet somehow often never reaches that depth because we fail to take the risk to actually feel that potential pain or loss or self-disclosure of the process of actually getting naked, and just how ironic that is. The one thing that is supposed to show us as truly open ends up being a show case for shyness and insecurities, and I am right there in the mix. In fact, I think that sometimes we use graphic images to cover this up and never truly get down to the core sensitivities and sensations. Free falling is a letting go that is rare and powerful....and scary as hell.
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28th Aug 2013 11:34am
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28th Aug 2013 11:55am
I think this is something we all face at times......erotica on demand is ......sometimes hard pressed.
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Anonymous
28th Aug 2013 11:40am
Some just don't wanna play and that's fine, too....I am sure they have valid reasons rt.
A nice write all the same...
strider
A nice write all the same...
strider
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28th Aug 2013 11:58am
Well, and that's the point; some days I can't do it either. I'll do it if you'll do it if you won't push me if I feel up to it.....writing erotica is a relationship, with ourselves, the audience, partners, the subject, and our own emotional language skills.
Re: If She Would Write with Me
28th Aug 2013 2:10pm
If I am reading this right the two people involved are not on the same page? Kept my interest right to the end.
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Anonymous
29th Aug 2013 2:08am
A response in on the way... just because. =)
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29th Aug 2013 2:42am
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Anonymous
29th Aug 2013 3:13am
Brilliant write. I can see how it is the inspiration of Petie_Minou write. Well done! :)
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29th Aug 2013 4:37am
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6th Sep 2013 6:17pm
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6th Sep 2013 6:58pm
I'm in this same category. I want to be able to be absolutely free to write, but I am self-conscious and my attitudes and memory and pains and desires and hubris and arrogance and shyness and insensitivities and fear of failure and my own fetishes and eroticism get in the way...this is so very human to talk it up and choke in the clutch. The beauty of it is that once there, there is that sense of wanting to have done it, and thus being one step closer to actually letting go....Like gently entering cold water...and warming up to the idea.....You are not broken, my sensitive Friend.