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The Morning
I awoke
knowing you had passed
absence was clearer
than Spica in waxing night
the morning sun
did not shine upon your skin
the coldness
forever in touch
with hands and lips
the silence of your charm
echo but a distant gasp
from the hole in my heart
I found you dancing
amongst the coastal heath
where Rabbit Orchids sigh
I sensed you rousing
in the blood I sipped
from iron earth vines
you kissed radiant tears
in the calm ocean breeze
my shining
every day in your presence
I am born again
silence into silence
endless within day and night
the mourning son eclipsed.
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Re: The Morning
27th Aug 2013 12:01pm
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27th Aug 2013 4:33pm
Thanks heaps Magdalena. I'm glad you saw the beauty in this piece. I can't help but put pressure on myself to write something honourable, when writing about somebody close to me.
Re: The Morning
Anonymous
27th Aug 2013 12:07pm
excellent case
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27th Aug 2013 4:37pm
Re: The Morning
27th Aug 2013 12:42pm
Lovely images, enjoyed that read.
"I sensed you rousing
in the blood I sipped
from iron earth vines"
my fav part.
"I sensed you rousing
in the blood I sipped
from iron earth vines"
my fav part.
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re: Re: The Morning
27th Aug 2013 5:53pm
Thank you Atakti. I'm so stoked you enjoyed this one. It was inspired by a conversation I had with a new friend.
They're my favourite lines too... it's the alcoholic in me. :)
They're my favourite lines too... it's the alcoholic in me. :)
Re: The Morning
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27th Aug 2013 3:14pm
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27th Aug 2013 8:48pm
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28th Aug 2013 12:01pm
I'm stoked you dug the imagery... and the second stanza, genius??? Can S2 beat me at chess? Possibly. Are you building up me up, so you can bring me down in the next poetry battle? Likely. The bigger the ego.... :)
Thanks heaps LSP.
Thanks heaps LSP.
Re: The Morning
Anonymous
27th Aug 2013 10:29pm
Love these lines:where Rabbit Orchids sigh
I sensed you rousing
in the blood I sipped
from iron earth vines
you kissed radiant tears
in the calm ocean breeze
my shining
every day in your presence
I am born again
silence into silence
endless within day and night
the mourning son eclipsed.
I sensed you rousing
in the blood I sipped
from iron earth vines
you kissed radiant tears
in the calm ocean breeze
my shining
every day in your presence
I am born again
silence into silence
endless within day and night
the mourning son eclipsed.
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re: Re: The Morning
28th Aug 2013 12:06pm
Anonymous
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