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the lost and found
People would say
such bizarre things to me
Like hello or how are you today
Sometimes i think everyone
Has lost their mind
Luckily i know where
the lost and found is
But it doesn't help me
My missing sock isn't there
I guess I'll just walk to the store
And get another pair
I like to flirt with
the sales associates
Anyway
Then they'll say something
Like "have a nice day"
I swear these people are cracked
such bizarre things to me
Like hello or how are you today
Sometimes i think everyone
Has lost their mind
Luckily i know where
the lost and found is
But it doesn't help me
My missing sock isn't there
I guess I'll just walk to the store
And get another pair
I like to flirt with
the sales associates
Anyway
Then they'll say something
Like "have a nice day"
I swear these people are cracked
Published 25th Aug 2013
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27th Aug 2013 3:03am
alright. just from this one piece i think i'll be following you here. you certainly know what you're doing as far as the natural flow of the piece and all that, and i kind of like the personality of this piece.
maybe in line 5 "mind" could be "minds." but, other than that, i really can't think of anything technically. i'd hate to have to "tear it apart" or whatever you said you wanted us to do with your pieces here.
maybe in line 5 "mind" could be "minds." but, other than that, i really can't think of anything technically. i'd hate to have to "tear it apart" or whatever you said you wanted us to do with your pieces here.
