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Help.
The lie we call life
Killing with a knife
Your screams of fear
Make me cry those tears
Exasperated and tired
Of those who lied
Scared and defyed
By the hell you cry
If I become you
If I let you change me
Will you stop controlling ?
And finally leave me be ?
You win.
Killing with a knife
Your screams of fear
Make me cry those tears
Exasperated and tired
Of those who lied
Scared and defyed
By the hell you cry
If I become you
If I let you change me
Will you stop controlling ?
And finally leave me be ?
You win.
Published 18th Dec 2010
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18th Dec 2010 7:14pm
really great poem your getting better everyday:)
but remember you cant lose all the time
but remember you cant lose all the time
18th Dec 2010 11:14pm
20th Dec 2010 4:23am
they make want to cry
how they all connect
to my life
they make me feel closer
to the dark
in which i lie...
Thank you for your work hope to see more soon.
how they all connect
to my life
they make me feel closer
to the dark
in which i lie...
Thank you for your work hope to see more soon.
20th Dec 2010 8:15am
It's another great piece from you.
I like how you totally surrender to whoever is trying to change you if that will make him leave you alone...'If I become you
If I let you change me
Will you stop controlling ?
And finally leave me be ?
You win.'
I like how you totally surrender to whoever is trying to change you if that will make him leave you alone...'If I become you
If I let you change me
Will you stop controlling ?
And finally leave me be ?
You win.'
21st Dec 2010 5:18am
19th Jan 2011 11:15pm
wow. relatable from what ive read of your work this is definately the best one so far.
relatable to a poin tthat it makes me want to cry.
never give up . you posess talent.
keep your work raw. its great like this :)
relatable to a poin tthat it makes me want to cry.
never give up . you posess talent.
keep your work raw. its great like this :)
22nd Jan 2011 9:21am
5th Nov 2014 9:44am
Wow I like this, it really speaks to me! Its like you totally surrender to the one thing/person that has complete control over you every move.
Keep it up its really good soon all work gets bettet .
Keep it up its really good soon all work gets bettet .
