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He is There
The wind has stopped blowing through her garden.
No birds can be heard or seen.
The anemic sun is lost behind blue clouds.
She is naked, crying softly;
scared. She feels his breath move her hair, and him
all around her, mimicking her fetal position.
His lips touch her neck as she turns in him; feeling
his lips with hers and fingertips.
She is relieved and cries again:
better tears.
When she wakes there is snow without tracks.
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Re: He is There
10th Aug 2013 11:17am
better tears.. when she wakes there is snow without tracks.. the things i would do to crawl inside your thinking stick and steal your poetic perfection ..
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re: Re: He is There
10th Aug 2013 11:23am
The things I would do to allow such a just theft.
Thank you, big D. Hope you're well.
Thank you, big D. Hope you're well.
Re: He is There
10th Aug 2013 1:10pm
y'ow, kid,
this'n Hurts in
reading..............there may or may not
be such of a 'thing'
poetic(or-any-other)
'perfection', but this'ere
is def effective in jostlin'
one's affect[ions]---butbut,
why wood eye have any
idear[?]wtf i's talkabout------
may thee lordlordlord show'r blblblblblblessings upon ye
this'n Hurts in
reading..............there may or may not
be such of a 'thing'
poetic(or-any-other)
'perfection', but this'ere
is def effective in jostlin'
one's affect[ions]---butbut,
why wood eye have any
idear[?]wtf i's talkabout------
may thee lordlordlord show'r blblblblblblessings upon ye
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re: Re: He is There
12th Aug 2013 8:08am
Well, fuck me. That is an exceedingly kind thing to say, saxxman.
Bless you, all the more.
Bless you, all the more.
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Re: He is There
11th Aug 2013 9:07pm
A whole lot going on with what isn't said. This is where your writing flourishes, IMO.
Superbly charged with layered meanings.
Superbly charged with layered meanings.
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12th Aug 2013 8:09am
Re: He is There
12th Aug 2013 3:24pm
Nice write Sir, enjoyed it. Your writing always has a way of making me think of what you didn’t say, or the true meaning. Some writing styles put it all out there, but you always leave just enough out to get the mind wondering. Thank you.
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12th Aug 2013 4:03pm