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Is To Live Here In Hell?
At later date it may translate to something of substance
meaning with honorable motive and and goal
but first impulse really lacks any virtue
devoid of any touch of soul
for that first impression is about animal callings
the beast wanting to devour it's prey
claiming the curves of the body
the ebbs and flows of the physique at play
pure pleasure seeker culminated in male release
oblivious to danger signs
primal command not impeded in the least
not worried with the consequences
or the guilt that may be witnessed after the fact
conquest felt great in the moment
but is the conscience still intact?
how it displays the imperfections
some say that were embedded from Eden's events
if we stay on lust's path
is hell where we unrepentant sinners shall be sent
or does such a place exist only in the recesses of the human mind
such a question has broader implications
for what we do with our limited time
Based On Sting's song, "Consider Me Gone"
meaning with honorable motive and and goal
but first impulse really lacks any virtue
devoid of any touch of soul
for that first impression is about animal callings
the beast wanting to devour it's prey
claiming the curves of the body
the ebbs and flows of the physique at play
pure pleasure seeker culminated in male release
oblivious to danger signs
primal command not impeded in the least
not worried with the consequences
or the guilt that may be witnessed after the fact
conquest felt great in the moment
but is the conscience still intact?
how it displays the imperfections
some say that were embedded from Eden's events
if we stay on lust's path
is hell where we unrepentant sinners shall be sent
or does such a place exist only in the recesses of the human mind
such a question has broader implications
for what we do with our limited time
Based On Sting's song, "Consider Me Gone"
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Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
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9th Aug 2013 10:45am
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9th Aug 2013 12:33pm
Thanks. If this read as asking question but skipping answers then I succeeded in my goal....
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Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
Anonymous
9th Aug 2013 11:18am
you did this write right jazz manor...strider

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re: Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
9th Aug 2013 12:39pm
Thanks. The origin of life is a topic I mostly avoid; that is probably why it isn't as substantial as it might have been.
Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
Anonymous
9th Aug 2013 2:00pm
Your poetry just gets better and better
Thank you for a good read
Kitty
Thank you for a good read
Kitty

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re: Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
9th Aug 2013 6:00pm
Umm I don't know about getting better and better but I am touched that you feel that way!
Thanks for taking the time to read my ramblings.
Thanks for taking the time to read my ramblings.
Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
9th Aug 2013 2:31pm
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9th Aug 2013 6:03pm
This summer has seen me developed an ADD like character when it comes to writing. I have many ideas in my head about a poem but none seem to have much energy when it is time to write.
Thank you for the kind comment.
Thank you for the kind comment.
Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
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9th Aug 2013 5:42pm
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Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
9th Aug 2013 8:26pm
Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
10th Aug 2013 5:07pm
Nice contemplating thoughts...asking the right questions. Don't we deserve a better place than hell? Good read my friend...(me like)
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re: Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
10th Aug 2013 9:01pm
That question is on the list of those that I feel inadequate in answering. Glad you enjoyed my mush of words.
Re: Is To Live Here In Hell?
10th Aug 2013 7:06pm
Excellence in pondering Jazz-indeed Worthy
I think if we knew all the answers we wouldn't be truly living lol
excellent Pen Sir!!!
I think if we knew all the answers we wouldn't be truly living lol
excellent Pen Sir!!!
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10th Aug 2013 9:02pm