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Bleed Black... For the last time !!!
Dressed up in the black sequenced apparel
Liquid batting eyes & a stony carol
Flaming Red stilettos matching her lips
Her beauty attracted like an acid trip.
As she entered the faming hall
All eyes were glued on this rag doll
Keeping an upside curve on her face
She kept walking as in a master race.
None had the clue of the mysterious girl
The motive sealed inside this mother of pearl
Soon she stepped towards her man, a handsome hunk
Took out her pistol, shouting : "I don't give a fuck".
It was her time to play this last game
Game of love which had made her defame
The black and red was all set to bleed
She shot herself in stomach in no speed
Took her last breaths in lover's arm
It was her retribution not self harm.
Liquid batting eyes & a stony carol
Flaming Red stilettos matching her lips
Her beauty attracted like an acid trip.
As she entered the faming hall
All eyes were glued on this rag doll
Keeping an upside curve on her face
She kept walking as in a master race.
None had the clue of the mysterious girl
The motive sealed inside this mother of pearl
Soon she stepped towards her man, a handsome hunk
Took out her pistol, shouting : "I don't give a fuck".
It was her time to play this last game
Game of love which had made her defame
The black and red was all set to bleed
She shot herself in stomach in no speed
Took her last breaths in lover's arm
It was her retribution not self harm.
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8th Aug 2013 7:32am
WOW, that's something, Brinda. A passionate and excellent crafted poem! I enjoyed it a lot!
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8th Aug 2013 7:36am
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8th Aug 2013 9:45am
Now that is some different kind of retribution Brinda. Killing two birds with one stone so to speak. Taking away ones own pain and leaving the cause of the pain in mental torment.
Excellent write.
Excellent write.
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8th Aug 2013 9:58am
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Anonymous
8th Aug 2013 11:05am
Excellent poem brinda....cool twist.
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8th Aug 2013 7:03pm
...but retribution is to know you have bestowed some form of pay back. How would this mother of pearl know that, if she was dead? Maybe the idealization of knowing he would serve a life sentence of guilt? hmm....
Very intriguing and wonderfully written piece, Brinda! Xoxo
Very intriguing and wonderfully written piece, Brinda! Xoxo
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9th Aug 2013 5:51am
Yes rain.. it was to make him guilty rest of his life !!
Thankyou for sharing your views. xoxo
Thankyou for sharing your views. xoxo
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Anonymous
9th Aug 2013 7:55am
This was riveting. Really well written adventure. Nice detail. :)
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30th Oct 2013 9:27am
It bleeds inside dt spreads to reader’s eyes...d arm still carrying d gal...cant repent to make another mistake by leaving d ever living gal... who left d body untouched...
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