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Fuck me in Verses
i.
Touch me in verses
In lines,
breaks and spaces
In commas
dots and dashes,
Think of me
in my
barest
Then feel me deeply
with your mind
and senses...
ii.
Love me in verses
In haikus,
quatrains
or sonnets
With a pen
and a sheet of paper
Open up
your mind,
heart
and soul
Something you've
never really
done before...
iii.
Or why don't you just
fuck me in verses?
Talk dirty to me
in free verses
or old fashion
proses
With your mind,
I want you to explore
what's in between
my legs
in an iambic
pentameter
Do it good,
then you'll have me
rushing in your bed
after...
Published 10th Dec 2010
| Edited 18th Jul 2011
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10th Dec 2010 3:29pm
You are quite bold by daring to go deep into the innermost closet of your audience to probe for what is hidden there.
Who would not desire the desires thus spilled in your poem? Who?
Who would not desire the desires thus spilled in your poem? Who?
11th Dec 2010 2:27pm
thanks Divine, haha! get use to it already, for I will always be like this :)
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11th Dec 2010 2:29pm
thanks for finding it different... that's my goal to create something unique ;)
12th Dec 2010 8:06am
use of "every" directs you to singular nouns vs. plural. So either
Touch me in verses
In every line
break and space
In every comma
dot and dashe,
Think of me
bare
OR
Touch me in verses
In lines
breaks and spaces
In commas
dots and dashes,
Think of me
bare
See? I think I prefer the second (keeping plural nouns but dropping the "every") because it emphasizes the "more" aspect of your wanting. That you want it again and again over time.
Like the use of grammar and poetry genres. =)
Touch me in verses
In every line
break and space
In every comma
dot and dashe,
Think of me
bare
OR
Touch me in verses
In lines
breaks and spaces
In commas
dots and dashes,
Think of me
bare
See? I think I prefer the second (keeping plural nouns but dropping the "every") because it emphasizes the "more" aspect of your wanting. That you want it again and again over time.
Like the use of grammar and poetry genres. =)
12th Dec 2010 10:35am
you are right... i see it now... and yes, i think i'll use the second one... thankss so soo much, i appreciate it! :)
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15th Dec 2010 2:35am
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21st Dec 2010 3:13am
I'd like to reply to that ok... it brought some thought to my mind... stand by ...
21st Dec 2010 11:32am
21st Dec 2010 3:27am
After reading a few of your poems, it's become obvious that you are an artist with words!
wow, thanks for saying that...Yes, I'm an artist( i guess it translate itself to my words?) but I'm still new to writing so I'm still struggling a bit... Thanks though for the sweet comment I appreciate it immensely! :)
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23rd Dec 2010 7:50pm
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7th Jan 2011 9:30pm
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15th Jan 2011 6:52pm
I want you to explore
what's in between
my legs
in an iambic
pentameter
AMAZING
what's in between
my legs
in an iambic
pentameter
AMAZING
15th Jan 2011 9:19pm
23rd Jan 2011 8:00pm
"...his touch
a verb dancing in the centre of a noun.
Some nights, I dreamed he'd written me, the bed
a page beneath his writer's hands. Romance
and drama played by touch, by scent, by taste.
In the other bed, the best, our guests dozed on,
dribbling their prose."
reminded me of that little bit from Anne Hathaway by Carol Ann Duffy.
'think of me in my barest' I love that idea...stripping everything back and presenting yourself bare on the page, cause things are always most beautiful in their rawest form.
a verb dancing in the centre of a noun.
Some nights, I dreamed he'd written me, the bed
a page beneath his writer's hands. Romance
and drama played by touch, by scent, by taste.
In the other bed, the best, our guests dozed on,
dribbling their prose."
reminded me of that little bit from Anne Hathaway by Carol Ann Duffy.
'think of me in my barest' I love that idea...stripping everything back and presenting yourself bare on the page, cause things are always most beautiful in their rawest form.
24th Jan 2011 00:27am
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1st Apr 2011 12:13pm
Wow, I guess this poem is my one hit wonder!
Maraming Salamat. :-)
Thanks so, so much guys! SMoocHH!
Maraming Salamat. :-)
Thanks so, so much guys! SMoocHH!
1st Oct 2011 5:39pm
Well Writen, I do like the format better here than on Writer's Cafe. I'll leave it to the two of you to decide who it belongs too, but the piece is quite excellent.
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