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Opposed Forces
As torrents rage
inside untamed abyss
one look in the eyes
dictates something's amiss
freedom's call unheard within
steady barrage of hope can't break in
wish the well, a once upon a time tale
blind, sight can't see nor read in braille
darkness sits in exquisite comfort at home
higher power elucidates possibilities shown
feverishly fighting,
savagely unkind
long, and hard fought
the embattled mind
yet shadowed,
evil's hold upon the heart,
another round won,
at least one, this time...
inside untamed abyss
one look in the eyes
dictates something's amiss
freedom's call unheard within
steady barrage of hope can't break in
wish the well, a once upon a time tale
blind, sight can't see nor read in braille
darkness sits in exquisite comfort at home
higher power elucidates possibilities shown
feverishly fighting,
savagely unkind
long, and hard fought
the embattled mind
yet shadowed,
evil's hold upon the heart,
another round won,
at least one, this time...
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Re: Opposed Forces
23rd Jul 2013 2:44pm
An ongoing battle until the last breath I'm sure.
Great pen and expression Poetikmind.
Great pen and expression Poetikmind.
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re: Re: Opposed Forces
25th Jul 2013 2:37pm
Re: Opposed Forces
23rd Jul 2013 3:05pm
Breath...call upon the inner light and peace and exhale the negative energy and evil thoughts. Good chi!
Red
Red
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re: Re: Opposed Forces
25th Jul 2013 2:39pm
I'm breathing I'm breathing! lol
thanks for the positive encouragement
But next time, just bring coffee n doughnuts cuz all the breathing made me hungry! lol
thanks for the positive encouragement
But next time, just bring coffee n doughnuts cuz all the breathing made me hungry! lol
Re: Opposed Forces
Anonymous
23rd Jul 2013 3:58pm
Wonderful and powerful poem.
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feverishly fighting,
savagely unkind
long, and hard fought
the embattled mind
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our choices, good vs. evil
does indeed make for an embattled mind
good read
Kitty
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feverishly fighting,
savagely unkind
long, and hard fought
the embattled mind
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our choices, good vs. evil
does indeed make for an embattled mind
good read
Kitty
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re: Re: Opposed Forces
25th Jul 2013 2:40pm
Re: Opposed Forces
23rd Jul 2013 6:23pm
I actually wrote this down an am reciting some of hte verses. Powerful stuff.
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re: Re: Opposed Forces
25th Jul 2013 2:42pm
You did!? weelll, As long as ur not using it to become a millionaire! lol thanks I'm humbled n grateful for your time n thoughts :)
Re: Opposed Forces
Anonymous
23rd Jul 2013 9:28pm
So many choices in front of us to make at times. I learn the hard way most the time which one is right. Great write!! :)
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re: Re: Opposed Forces
25th Jul 2013 2:44pm
re: Re: Opposed Forces
25th Jul 2013 3:25pm
Thank you kind sir, I'm deeply grateful to you for commentary n support always, I hope in future visits to never disappoint :)
Re: Opposed Forces
25th Jul 2013 7:12pm
"darkness sits in exquisite comfort" ahhh Elegantly Eerie Expression...paints a picture of a shadowy throne where darkness dwells and one engulf in their own personal hell..love the ending
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re: Re: Opposed Forces
26th Jul 2013 1:17am
Keep on with these superb praisings n you gonna swell my head to the size of the Goodyear blimp lady lol truly appreciate u! :)
Re: Opposed Forces
Anonymous
26th Jul 2013 11:01am
You will always win this battle. You have a strong and positive will.
Descriptive and vivid imagery, cher.
Descriptive and vivid imagery, cher.
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Re: Opposed Forces
26th Jul 2013 11:17am
Aaaaawwwww sending u kisses! That was very sweet to say... Although I don't think it's very strong! lol appreciate u :)
Re: Opposed Forces
Anonymous
27th Jul 2013 9:48am
Written from the depths of experience. A haunting & powerful ink, Poetikmind. Great read! :)
*Peace* Carlene
*Peace* Carlene
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re: Re: Opposed Forces
9th Aug 2013 3:50pm
I'm soooooo sorry my sweet Carlene, I hadn't realized I missed this amazing comment from u... :( but I'm truly happy you enjoyed n I thank u :)