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Glass Skull
My eyes gaze at nothing, my thoughts
flicker close, spin away, unchecked.
I think about shadows, how they soak
the ground at nightfall. They are there.
I shrug once, shake my head, mirror-shard
thoughts swirl around a glass skull of plasma.
Now the outside is clear. The middle is shades
of nothing and has swallowed me whole.
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Re: Glass Skull
12th Jul 2013 9:16pm
Re: Glass Skull
12th Jul 2013 9:29pm
I shrug once, shake my head, mirror-shard
thoughts swirl around a glass skull of plasma.
Especially liked this bit.
A whole lot of clever things swirlin' around
in there. Enjoyed the poem as a whole.
Well written.
thoughts swirl around a glass skull of plasma.
Especially liked this bit.
A whole lot of clever things swirlin' around
in there. Enjoyed the poem as a whole.
Well written.
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re: Re: Glass Skull
13th Jul 2013 10:18am
Scribbler :)
Thanks, this one was as awkward in the writing of it as the poem topic.
Thanks, this one was as awkward in the writing of it as the poem topic.
Re: Glass Skull
12th Jul 2013 9:30pm
Fuck me do I love reading some Atakti.. Hammered or not.. Is good my Euro flower tank girl friend! I want to hear a reading of it, the pauses, your use of structure and commas demands some recited action.. Stay true
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re: Re: Glass Skull
13th Jul 2013 10:20am
Evan, ya cantankerous bastard, I was thinking the same thing! - I should be able to put a decent reading together in the next couple of days.
Thanks, man. :)
Thanks, man. :)
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12th Jul 2013 10:29pm
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13th Jul 2013 2:20pm
Re: Glass Skull
13th Jul 2013 00:10am
I spent times staring at the shadow. How the soak the ground seeming to have depth and life. Being consumed in the moment by swirling ''plasma around a glass skull'' by the grace of God it's been awhile though. I may of gotten the metaphore wrong, but thats what it meant to me. Thanks great poem.
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13th Jul 2013 2:21pm
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13th Jul 2013 5:21am
Yeah, I love getting a hit from Atakti now and then. Am I hooked? Hell Yeah!
Concise and measured... so many of us have much to learn from your discipline. Great scribe.
Concise and measured... so many of us have much to learn from your discipline. Great scribe.
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13th Jul 2013 2:22pm
Re: Glass Skull
13th Jul 2013 5:15pm
Whether it's from comments or from example you inspire the burn to learn. Shadows soak the ground wow.
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13th Jul 2013 9:34pm
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Anonymous
14th Jul 2013 3:33am
Enjoyed the view here ataki...
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Anonymous
26th Jul 2013 2:21am
A stunning write, Atakti. Brilliant ending! Takes the reader to a whole 'other' place. Loved it! One for the reading list!! :)
*Peace* Carlene
*Peace* Carlene
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Re: Glass Skull
6th Aug 2013 8:56am
Cleverly worded and I love how it sounds when I read it out loud. Very well done :)
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6th Aug 2013 10:27am