Sorry

This is good, the emotions are real, and the subject is great too. But I will have to say, it does ruin it to use "internet-language" in a heavy poem like this. It removes the serious anger and feel. Makes it look very... teen? I don't quite know how to describe it, but I would replace "cuz" with a " 'cause " or something like that :)

Thanks, and its true. I thought the same after i'd posted it. Sorry if it makes you like it less...

It doesnt, its just an advice :) You can still edit it out if you want^^

i enjoyed your poem simple yet deep...good job

Thank you.

I really like the emotion to this piece

This feels real similar to "Pass" which I wrote a few months back. Way relatable piece. Thanks for releasing this, Jacksylverwind!