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Unrepentant Sinner (She's not picking up, call back later)
I inhale the promise of cocoa
dreams, eyes half-lidded
as my lips close around
satin smoothness.
My insides melt... this
is naughty nougat heat.
Brittle, soft shivers follow
rice crisp racing pulses...
Caramel kisses are mine, but
I want more. I seek the curve
of almond crunches, willingly
succumbing to chocolate
wickedness...
Entry in the "Evilly Delicious" comp
Published 11th Jun 2013
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2013 6:14am
Ha! Awesome! I get the same feeling when I drink Vodka! Great as usual, Mike.
11th Jun 2013 2:50pm
Omg, been off the sugar for three weeks and dying for some chocolate... Worked from memory, but if I read this poem I may succumb!
Thanks, Mike. :)
Thanks, Mike. :)
Anonymous
11th Jun 2013 9:11am
Nice work! good luck in the comp :-)
11th Jun 2013 2:51pm
11th Jun 2013 9:25am
Oh and how moreish it is, you make it sound as divine as it is.
Yummy yummy Atakti. Good luck in the comp. :)
Yummy yummy Atakti. Good luck in the comp. :)
11th Jun 2013 2:53pm
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11th Jun 2013 1:27pm
AAHHhhhhhhh!!! C H O C O L A T E !!!! The very word causes me to tremble in anticipation--soo deliciously decadent...just like your poem !
i wish you the very best of luck in the competition!!!
(Ummmm...Now, where did i stash that last "Kit-Kat" ???)
i wish you the very best of luck in the competition!!!
(Ummmm...Now, where did i stash that last "Kit-Kat" ???)
11th Jun 2013 2:55pm
Argh, chocolate attack, addict in withdrawal, poet down, poet down!!
*faint whisper* thank you, DK....
*faint whisper* thank you, DK....
11th Jun 2013 2:49pm
11th Jun 2013 2:56pm
Anonymous
11th Jun 2013 7:55pm
Well done ataki....good luck!!!
strider....
strider....
11th Jun 2013 9:17pm
Anonymous
11th Jun 2013 9:24pm
This poem is so tempting, can almost smell and taste the flavor of chocolate.....
A poem of the senses!
Good luck to you, Ataki!
A poem of the senses!
Good luck to you, Ataki!
11th Jun 2013 9:31pm
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Anonymous
12th Jun 2013 4:00pm
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12th Jun 2013 4:06pm
13th Jun 2013 00:34am
I get that this is about food, but it could absolutely be an erotic poem, and I don't mean in a food fetish kind of way. It's beautifully written and executed, the language is evocative and what is presented here could be metaphoric for other delights. Love this piece.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
13th Jun 2013 7:04pm
Oh, Indie, so pleased you noticed just how far the wickedness extends...
;)
Thank you so much for your kind comments.
;)
Thank you so much for your kind comments.
13th Jun 2013 6:26pm
13th Jun 2013 7:05pm
14th Jun 2013 3:32am
Perfect fucking definition of erotica.. i was thinking this should be entered in the contest then seen it was.. beautiful and elegant.
14th Jun 2013 5:13am
Devilish said "perfect fucking" I think I've died and gone to poetry heaven.
Thank you!..
:)
Thank you!..
:)
17th Jun 2013 2:25pm
Your flow is smooth like vanilla cream and your words are sharp like dark chocolate.
I will follow!
I will follow!
17th Jun 2013 6:50pm
