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Tornado pass
Sipping the crying ceiling
tomato-paste lips pucker pride
as Dale runs glad with his stash
so too Blue dances with Grey, washing
down the lane along overflowing streams
A tornado black skips the distance whipping
brought quiet then strolled to face the mountain
broke apart winded along the mountain sighed
while reeling in winds creatures loud once again
chirping and screaming safety softly reigning
they humor human by dancing steps delight
sifting seed peanuts and chi he laughs
canine and canines spread wide open
tasting drops beside innocent ears
She says the boat is leaving now
beat Heart sing forest and sea
tomato-paste lips pucker pride
as Dale runs glad with his stash
so too Blue dances with Grey, washing
down the lane along overflowing streams
A tornado black skips the distance whipping
brought quiet then strolled to face the mountain
broke apart winded along the mountain sighed
while reeling in winds creatures loud once again
chirping and screaming safety softly reigning
they humor human by dancing steps delight
sifting seed peanuts and chi he laughs
canine and canines spread wide open
tasting drops beside innocent ears
She says the boat is leaving now
beat Heart sing forest and sea
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Re: Tornado pass
11th Jun 2013 2:33am
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11th Jun 2013 2:41am
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2013 4:33am
Well done soul!
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11th Jun 2013 4:51am
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11th Jun 2013 6:19am
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2013 8:40am
A well written piece about the forces of nature, Soul,never seen a tornado but they do pass at times over the west coast where I live....
Like how you have build up the poem, almost symetric....
Like how you have build up the poem, almost symetric....
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11th Jun 2013 9:12am
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11th Jun 2013 12:58pm
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2013 5:40pm
wow..love how you structured the write to pack the potent punch with such force as the theme itself. love the metaphor and the slightly cluttered feel of the read adds to the chaotic force of the subject again. nice work man!
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11th Jun 2013 6:53pm
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Re: Tornado pass
13th Jun 2013 6:22pm
A tornado black skips the distance whipping
brought quiet then strolled to face the mountain
broke apart winded along the mountain sighed
while reeling in winds creatures loud once again
chirping and screaming safety softly reigning
Cleverly crafted write, stormy imagery.
brought quiet then strolled to face the mountain
broke apart winded along the mountain sighed
while reeling in winds creatures loud once again
chirping and screaming safety softly reigning
Cleverly crafted write, stormy imagery.
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13th Jun 2013 9:44pm