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Outside, Inside
Proudly loving our intimacies
the dawn breaks on the new day
waking to your mouth on my rod
leaves me with so little to say
The night was long in grand motion
in and out my prick so went
encouraged by responses of your body
until all my sperm was spent
And the agenda has yet to be completed
for the magic number is seven to reach
white, red, black, and flesh colored hosiery
taking you completely in each
So that even after we have parted
you can smile when you put each pair on
or even picture me in your presence
when something with him goes wrong
So don't think this is anyway an insult
no verbal wounds do I mean to cut
just the shearing away of those inhibitions
to release your inner slut
Thanks to Kasupuu for pre-publishing advice
the dawn breaks on the new day
waking to your mouth on my rod
leaves me with so little to say
The night was long in grand motion
in and out my prick so went
encouraged by responses of your body
until all my sperm was spent
And the agenda has yet to be completed
for the magic number is seven to reach
white, red, black, and flesh colored hosiery
taking you completely in each
So that even after we have parted
you can smile when you put each pair on
or even picture me in your presence
when something with him goes wrong
So don't think this is anyway an insult
no verbal wounds do I mean to cut
just the shearing away of those inhibitions
to release your inner slut
Thanks to Kasupuu for pre-publishing advice
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Re: Outside, Inside
Anonymous
2nd Jun 2013 5:34pm
kasupuu is very wise jazz manor...nice write
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2nd Jun 2013 6:39pm
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Re: Outside, Inside
Anonymous
2nd Jun 2013 7:05pm
Oh my - seven? A magical number, my friend!
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2nd Jun 2013 8:00pm
Re: Outside, Inside
Anonymous
2nd Jun 2013 9:20pm
the 4th stanza spun me right around! this is good work..much enjoyed!
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3rd Jun 2013 2:07am
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3rd Jun 2013 2:09am
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3rd Jun 2013 5:22pm
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3rd Jun 2013 9:12pm
re: Re: Outside, Inside
4th Jun 2013 2:34am
Ah thanks---I will confess however I wasn't really conscious of melody when I wrote it.
Re: Outside, Inside
3rd Jun 2013 11:21pm
I like the subtleness of your approach to this poem - nothing vulgar as far as I'm concerned, and I agree with CeCeLyric, there's some kind of melodic tunes in it, you can actually sing it!
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4th Jun 2013 2:36am
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re: Re: Outside, Inside
4th Jun 2013 2:59pm
Laugh--- the comments are making me think of a few George Michael songs; the only difference being the gender of the people who are favored.