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Just being you
Your hands touch me making my body tremble under their grasp, fingertips soft and gentle glide across my body making my innerself fall away into total submission, your voice so sultry and deep speak words of lustful want and need cause me to desire your caress only you can turn my world into a pleasurable palace, a dream state of being.... Your eyes see the deepest parts of my soul as my heart beats out of control, kisses so passionate and crafty the way you take control... You steal my worries and replace them with peace and bring love to a broken vessel... you are just being you!
By: R Fuller 10-19-2010
By: R Fuller 10-19-2010
Published 19th Oct 2010
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21st Oct 2010 2:04pm
21st Oct 2010 3:59pm
i don't think this is one of my best i've been going through alot this week so it always affects my writting....
22nd Oct 2010 10:02am
You were able to weave physical sensuality with deep emotional feeling together in this piece. It is poetic though written in prose.
I like this expression: 'Your eyes see the deepest parts of my soul...' Is it hyperbole? What figure of speech is it?
Thanks.
I like this expression: 'Your eyes see the deepest parts of my soul...' Is it hyperbole? What figure of speech is it?
Thanks.
22nd Oct 2010 6:28pm
wow, thank you! I just write how I feel and I feel that there is a moment when during making love that a person can no longer hide everything and that their partner can see into there soul through their eyes once that mask has fallen away....I've been there! thanks for the comment I appreciate it and take it as I write futher...:)
