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Just my Thought's
Here I am thinking of how you feel, how the scent of your cologne draws me in so close to your body, how your lips feel so soft against mine, how your finger tips feel as they glide down my breast...Thought's of the sound of your heart beating against my chest and your breath upon my neck, how your legs become intangled with mine and your thighs become warm and tight as you become so overwhelmed in your pleasures....Thinking of your facial features and soft moans as your body reaches that point of escasty and bliss, that high place where your mask falls away... how you try to capture your breathe and lie beside me your energy spent, wrapped up in each other...this is what I'm thinking today...
By: RFuller 10/14/2010
By: RFuller 10/14/2010
Published 14th Oct 2010
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14th Oct 2010 7:02pm
so sweetly, you've captured the essence of a lover's daily enchantment...
thank you.
thank you.
14th Oct 2010 7:05pm
awwe, thank you so much...I take your comments into great consideration as I write! :)
for a long time, I had the feeling that a moment was 3 minutes long. but I'm starting to doubt that belief. I've just gone through all of your poems and it seems that you've settled into a groove - kind of an extended emotional haiku - since raindrops. and I really like the "moment" that you celebrate in each poem.
I confess that on my second time through, as I read each one of your poems aloud, I timed myself as i did it. And they all came to about 70 seconds...a baker's minute, maybe.
Your mileage may vary, of course, but I was struck by the fullness of sensual content and the sense that maybe I couldn't hold any more in my head without spilling.
maybe my sense of a moment is off after all. maybe 70 seconds is all it is. and, dear, you make it enough...
I confess that on my second time through, as I read each one of your poems aloud, I timed myself as i did it. And they all came to about 70 seconds...a baker's minute, maybe.
Your mileage may vary, of course, but I was struck by the fullness of sensual content and the sense that maybe I couldn't hold any more in my head without spilling.
maybe my sense of a moment is off after all. maybe 70 seconds is all it is. and, dear, you make it enough...
19th Oct 2010 5:43am
Oh wow!!! I am amazed... thank you very much! I tend to just write as I feel the waves coming over me and this is how they end up, sometimes it's more and I rewrite it to contain all the passion without losing the meaning and erotica of the moment... but this is truely how I feel during these moments...thank you for your comments :D
19th Oct 2010 5:23pm
You captured pleasure, what any normal being longs for. The memory we keep forever. I loved it, I cherished it. It amazed me ♥
19th Oct 2010 5:25pm
