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Baby
Baby your all I ever needed
You're everything to me
I love you so much and I'm sorry
For letting you down
I know I failed you
But everything I said fell through
What I said was true
I just wanted it to be me and you
But I know I have failed you
I want you to be with me
I know we never talk
But we have such different schedules
Baby you fullfill this ritual
Baby I need you in my life
I want to be your wife
Just me and you
I promise this is true
You are my everything
My prince charming
Baby please believe me. I love you baby
Dont give up on me
Theres a war going on in my head
It makes me want to be dead
But you saved me
You've risen me up
Don't let this go
I ned you
your my everything
Baby please
Baby I'm asking you to marry me
Fill me with your love
I want a new start with you
Just me and you
I'm fighting this depression
You make it better
Baby you've got me away from the knife
You've made it better
baby I'm asking you to be my fiancé
I love you so much.
You're everything to me
I love you so much and I'm sorry
For letting you down
I know I failed you
But everything I said fell through
What I said was true
I just wanted it to be me and you
But I know I have failed you
I want you to be with me
I know we never talk
But we have such different schedules
Baby you fullfill this ritual
Baby I need you in my life
I want to be your wife
Just me and you
I promise this is true
You are my everything
My prince charming
Baby please believe me. I love you baby
Dont give up on me
Theres a war going on in my head
It makes me want to be dead
But you saved me
You've risen me up
Don't let this go
I ned you
your my everything
Baby please
Baby I'm asking you to marry me
Fill me with your love
I want a new start with you
Just me and you
I'm fighting this depression
You make it better
Baby you've got me away from the knife
You've made it better
baby I'm asking you to be my fiancé
I love you so much.
Published 29th Apr 2013
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29th Apr 2013 1:53pm
Nice write, but a lot of emotional blackmail there. I would never marry a girl because I felt pity for her. Many of us would feel blessed just to experience true love and it should be treasured and not used as a lever.
29th Apr 2013 2:13pm
It's not exactly asking for marriage out of pity. I'm asking him to marry me out of pure love. I'm telling him that yeah I may be messed up but my love has never faultered or failed. That he's the only one for me and I love him too much to lose him. It's saying that even though we never see each other or talk that much that I'm willing to fight for him cause he's the only one I see me being with. I wrote it to basically ask my bf to marry me. Yeah I'm not old fashioned. I don't want to wait. I love him too much. And It'e saying that he saved me and I am f=grateful for that. Does that explain it?
3rd May 2013 11:17am
Sorry I didn't reply before but I think you put your reply in the wrong box...it didn't show up on my comments and I came back for another read.
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Maybe it was the tense
"Theres a war going on in my head "
should have been " There was...
and
"I'm fighting this depression " should have been
something more positive otherwise he thinks you are still depressive and if you are when that much in love the future don't looks so good.
Maybe I shouldn't have commented, but a lot of getting what you want is to do with your personal public relations image.
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Maybe it was the tense
"Theres a war going on in my head "
should have been " There was...
and
"I'm fighting this depression " should have been
something more positive otherwise he thinks you are still depressive and if you are when that much in love the future don't looks so good.
Maybe I shouldn't have commented, but a lot of getting what you want is to do with your personal public relations image.
3rd May 2013 1:08pm
I appreciate the comment. They help. And if your wandering he said yes.
3rd May 2013 4:38pm
6th Aug 2013 6:17pm
That wont be happening... He left me... Didn't say anything or give me a heads up he just left me...
7th Aug 2013 2:25pm
Hey VPL 69...I guess that all you can do is to remember the best bits and treasure those and the way that they helped you. You made one good step now be positive and look for the next.
If anyone treats you like that it shows their real side and it you is the winner because you have been so good.
If anyone treats you like that it shows their real side and it you is the winner because you have been so good.
12th Aug 2013 6:57pm
Thanks... I'll try and remeber the good times.... I just don't know how that is gonna happen....
12th Aug 2013 10:40pm
Holding good thoughts is uplifting...like holding a balloon. Holding bad ones is like holding a bucket of water and tiring. Just try and always switch to the good ones and dream of something you want in a few years. It reprograms the brain to be positive.
Humans are designed to have positive brain chemicals when they do good things and have positive thoughts.
Also try and think of others and helping them rather than dwelling on yourself and finally do some aerobic exercise everyday and don't eat junk food especially manufactured sugars.
;) here endeath the lesson for today...seriously...life is what you make of it.
Humans are designed to have positive brain chemicals when they do good things and have positive thoughts.
Also try and think of others and helping them rather than dwelling on yourself and finally do some aerobic exercise everyday and don't eat junk food especially manufactured sugars.
;) here endeath the lesson for today...seriously...life is what you make of it.
15th Sep 2013 6:10pm
Thanks... I already know what I'm doing. In less then 7 months when I turn 18 I'm moving.
8th May 2013 6:16pm
I think, SuiGen, you have been a bit hard here. This is an honest and realistic poem, I think, and it's love. That's all I read in it, myself. And marriage. All good.
14th May 2013 3:30pm
