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~That Last Kiss~
I never looked back after I lived my "wild" days...,
Testing the 7 deadly sins, in many different ways.
Sexually deviant behaviors, I was lustfilled, I was vain,
Selfish, self centered, thoughtless, insane.
Devoid of all feeling, praying for death soon,
A souless, godless hedonist, burning heroin in a spoon.
Drug "seduced", alchohol induced, craving all that I lack,
Running in zig zags, can't fall through the crack.
Trying to fill the hole inside, that at times seems to burn,
Too high right now, can't focus and still for more I yearn.
I just can't seem to consume enough to put this fire out,
Can't reach the height I'd need to be to take away this doubt.
Don't say that thing, take it back! For tomorrow, you will die.
You said it, Damn! Now there it is, you couldn't let me say goodbye?
Everyone else's kiss you received, you accepted it with grace,
"Don't want your germs," is what I got, as you turned away your face!
What the fuck? I was only 12! "Daddy, how do I handle this?
"Maybe the "wild" days wouldn't have been, if you'd just let me have that last kiss.
Testing the 7 deadly sins, in many different ways.
Sexually deviant behaviors, I was lustfilled, I was vain,
Selfish, self centered, thoughtless, insane.
Devoid of all feeling, praying for death soon,
A souless, godless hedonist, burning heroin in a spoon.
Drug "seduced", alchohol induced, craving all that I lack,
Running in zig zags, can't fall through the crack.
Trying to fill the hole inside, that at times seems to burn,
Too high right now, can't focus and still for more I yearn.
I just can't seem to consume enough to put this fire out,
Can't reach the height I'd need to be to take away this doubt.
Don't say that thing, take it back! For tomorrow, you will die.
You said it, Damn! Now there it is, you couldn't let me say goodbye?
Everyone else's kiss you received, you accepted it with grace,
"Don't want your germs," is what I got, as you turned away your face!
What the fuck? I was only 12! "Daddy, how do I handle this?
"Maybe the "wild" days wouldn't have been, if you'd just let me have that last kiss.
Published 12th Oct 2010
| Edited 28th Oct 2010
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15th Oct 2010 8:04am
some spelling mistakes,
accepted not excepted
an odd cliché; 1, dancing naked under the moon,
2, Devoid of all morals
but they don't matter. this poem is completely different to the last one of yours i comment on. this has something more.
it flows well, some good images.
what i really like about this poem is that as an adult the persona in the poem still blames the father.
great twist from grown up to child, it was an unexpected delight. prose at times but some prose poetry can match non prose poetry, this piece for me does just that.
like i say, sort some of the spelling out, that's all really for me. otherwise it's a great poem.
accepted not excepted
an odd cliché; 1, dancing naked under the moon,
2, Devoid of all morals
but they don't matter. this poem is completely different to the last one of yours i comment on. this has something more.
it flows well, some good images.
what i really like about this poem is that as an adult the persona in the poem still blames the father.
great twist from grown up to child, it was an unexpected delight. prose at times but some prose poetry can match non prose poetry, this piece for me does just that.
like i say, sort some of the spelling out, that's all really for me. otherwise it's a great poem.
15th Oct 2010 5:56pm
Thank you Billy, I need the input. I'll check the spelling and work harder on the next. You're the best!
15th Oct 2010 5:59pm
I have only been able to write about my life experiences, my poems are true to my life.
15th Oct 2010 9:48pm
it's the same for many people.
it's often why teenage poems are often angsty. lol
15th Oct 2010 11:57pm
LOL! Ahhh, to be able to draw from my teenage angst again.....but, alas, those days are all too far behind! (I mean very, very far behind...) LMFAO!!I guess that I'll just have to continue to draw on my Mid life unresolved "daddy issues." LOL! What drives you, Billy?
16th Oct 2010 6:34am
without sounding cheesy as shit; life and the perception of it in others.
i;m way to happey to write about my own. a lot of the nostalgic stuff is truish but in general it's all fabrication.
24th Nov 2010 2:50pm
and remember it well. If I was looking in the personas face I would want to say how sorry I was for the fucked up childhood, as well as many other fucked up past experiences.
14th Feb 2011 3:41am
Thank you for remembering... and thank you for the friendship, you are sooo very important to me. If forgiveness was needed it would be given with whole heart.
