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Love & Relief Haiku
A strange feeling called love,
Pulled out life from the cocoon-
All darkness resolved.
Might you can fall in,
Some momentary relief-
But each moment contributes span.
A span that ends on a destination-
That stops the search for nectar-
So what, when stored in a bee-hive!
Pulled out life from the cocoon-
All darkness resolved.
Might you can fall in,
Some momentary relief-
But each moment contributes span.
A span that ends on a destination-
That stops the search for nectar-
So what, when stored in a bee-hive!
Published 7th Oct 2010
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7th Oct 2010 3:29pm
7th Oct 2010 3:33pm
Anonymous
18th Jan 2011 2:37am
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20th Jan 2011 10:38am
I think you are right mr. holdit and I appreciate you for pointing me to that and also apologise overhere. I was learning haiku at the time of composition and even though I can debate with you over love and relief as natural phenomenons, however, 5 7 5 is not here. So syntaxically this may not be a haiku. A literal thanks to you for highlighting the deficiency and an applause for your true knowledge.
