Analyze This!

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 The beautiful teenage girl followed the puppy, panicked that it would fall off the cliff to which it was heading. "No, stop!" She yelled. The puppy stopped at the very edge of the cliff. Why was it behaving this way? She slowly approached the animal, coaxing it towards her. She reached the edge of the cliff, but before she could bring the puppy to safety, it slipped and fell into the stormy waters below. She snatched at it in despair, but she too fell, never realizing that it wasn't a puppy she was trying to save, but a hideous demon with slits for a mouth and four red glowing eyes.

The beautiful teenage girl followed the puppy,
panicked
   that it would fall
      off the cliff
         to which it was heading.

"No, stop!" She yelled.

The puppy stopped
   at the very edge
      of the cliff.

Why was it behaving this way?

She slowly approached the animal,
   coaxing it
      towards her.

She reached the edge
   of the cliff,
but
   before she could bring the puppy to safety,
it slipped and fell
   into the stormy waters below.

She snatched
   at it
   in despair,
but she too fell,
   never realizing
      that it wasn't a puppy
      she was trying to save,
         but a hideous demon
            with slits
               for a mouth
            and four red glowing eyes.
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The girl followed the puppy, panicked.
"No, stop!" She yelled.
The puppy stopped.
Why was it behaving this way?
She slowly approached the animal.
She reached the edge,
but the demon slipped and fell.
She snatched
but she too fell.
Seeking to save others, we may endanger ourselves if in our excited state of empathy we forget to really look at what we are trying to save; it might be a trap.


The work of the soul is to give itself away, and the objective of the emotional vampires is to catch us unaware and vulnerable, and so we must be on guard and yet unguarded,  that is actively not passively non-violent.


Working the Shadows

Seeking harmonics
that settle the soul,
living on time
that's borrowed from old,
each shaman advances
and molds to his fate,
laying out lines
with amulets straight;
these are the dances
that come with the dawn,
watching for crevices,
an opening pawn,
ever about some
devotee to yawn,
are complexity's nature
of each moment's spawn.

runningturtle87

I admired the beautiful, warm brown eyes
I lightly touched the silky fur
It was about to rain
Visions fell before my eyes
A puppy, afraid
I looked, and he was gone
Wobbling near the edge
No!
I dive and reach for innocence
Too late, I fall into the violent crashing waves
The Demon smiles, and I see truth
Not a puppy
Trickery
I fell for my own trick

magnifico! Brilliant! If you're m only two contestants then I'm going to have a hell of a time choosing a winner. You made a great point about emotional vampires, running turtle, and you, Danii, made the wonderful play on the girl emotions for the "puppy".

I read in the paper today
some homeless cunt fell off a cliff
while trying to eat a dog

They say she was on a lot of drugs
Funny how she could afford them
but not a place to sleep, eat, and piss

I hope she found what she was looking for
and that some greater power guided her somewhere nice
I feel bad for the dog though

Analyze This


The beautiful teenage girl followed the puppy,
the puppy started running away

   The animal was a familiar

She panicked that it would fall off the cliff,
where it seemed to be heading

   The animal was a shape-shifter

"No, stop!" She yelled and the puppy stopped
at the very edge of the cliff

   The animal was not who she saw

Why was her puppy behaving this way?
she slowly approached the animal

   The animal was what the demon wanted her to see

She coaxed the puppy nearer to her,
she reached the edge of the cliff

   She was so caught up in illusions

But before she could bring the puppy to safety,
it slipped and fell into the stormy waters below

   She failed to see reality

She snatched at it in despair, but she too fell,
never realizing that it wasn't a puppy

   The reality was that she was falling

She was trying to save a hideous demon,
with slits for a mouth and four red glowing eyes  

   There was no puppy
   
She awoke from her dream, shaking
her puppy was licking her nose

   She went to the kitchen
   There, sitting on the table
   Was a note from her husband
   And a legal request for a divorce
   She thought she would cry
   But came only a sigh
   He had done everything
   To push her to the brink
   She would not let go
   So he pushed her
   
Later in the day, when he had moved
she looked back at her dream

Finally the demon was gone
Surprisingly she felt relieved.

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PLEASE NOTE:
I made an assumption that the young girl...her age unknown - had married too early....this does happen....even in North America.  She did not realize that marriage was difficult and the person you married could turn out to be a demon.

Poor pup hungry for attention
Searching for a master
Which was you
The stray looked innocent enough
Sad puppy eyes
Lonely whimpers
You go to pet the mutt
He backs away from your hand
You try again
Again the mutt backs away
As you keep attempting to pet the pup
You're unaware of the danger ahead
Finally you grab the young mutt
He bites you
Then you start to itch
Come to find out the pup has fleas
You scratch and scratch until
You took that step
Falling to your doom
On the jagged rocks below
The pup then make its way down the mountain
Eating your remains like dog food
Consuming your DNA the pup becomes you
The master

Be your own master or you will be mastered. There's always someone willing to take your spot. Jealousy

The girl frantically ran
She had to make it
Here puppy ran away
chasing the wind

She wondered why it ran,
why did it behave like this?
She still followed him
even when he jump off of the cliff

The puppy wasn't a dog
it was a hideous demon in disguise
Her fear overcame her head
so it's true face her mind had to hide