"Imagery" challenge
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milkyway said:[quote-68956-wanderer]So much said with so few words. The spacing took "something" away from it. Good poem this! Thank you.
what you don't like the "Sultry" curves? thought I would try it out...guess that's a no lol
And thank you, glad you liked my poem [/quote]
Forgive me. I'm new to it!
what you don't like the "Sultry" curves? thought I would try it out...guess that's a no lol
And thank you, glad you liked my poem [/quote]
Forgive me. I'm new to it!
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goodest said:Now this may seem odd
Since I have already Found God
I mean He Was Always Right Here
My heart sees Him crystal clear
So there's no desire in my heart
To do before my Judgment Day starts
However there is this one thing
It's kind of like Spiritual Bling
That I would want in this Earthly Life
And that's to go to the River Jordan and be Baptized in the same water as Christ...
One day my friend. One day! Thank you for this brilliant poem! Bless!
Since I have already Found God
I mean He Was Always Right Here
My heart sees Him crystal clear
So there's no desire in my heart
To do before my Judgment Day starts
However there is this one thing
It's kind of like Spiritual Bling
That I would want in this Earthly Life
And that's to go to the River Jordan and be Baptized in the same water as Christ...
One day my friend. One day! Thank you for this brilliant poem! Bless!
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dustyjjewels said:You steal in the broad daylight
You're even swifter at night
You've stolen my heart
My belief
And my time
My lonely days I've left behind
I was so bold I thought I'd never fall
Now that they're all yours
Im glad,you can have them all
"You're even swifter at night" that line made me chuckle. Nice one! Thank you.
You're even swifter at night
You've stolen my heart
My belief
And my time
My lonely days I've left behind
I was so bold I thought I'd never fall
Now that they're all yours
Im glad,you can have them all
"You're even swifter at night" that line made me chuckle. Nice one! Thank you.
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MrAlptraum said: Rain
Torrents of the sky's excess
drowning all beneath.
Washing sins of stubborn deserts;
that choose to wash in Sun.
The drops they race along my nose
then dive just to disperse.
A drop of cloud is all but long-lived,
but worth its weight in air.
The painful pour of relentless rain
eases my unrest.
Such healing beauty at its core.
This word is my best.
Your words paint a picture, Perfect! Now rain might just be my new best word. Thank you for posting this MrAlptraum!
Torrents of the sky's excess
drowning all beneath.
Washing sins of stubborn deserts;
that choose to wash in Sun.
The drops they race along my nose
then dive just to disperse.
A drop of cloud is all but long-lived,
but worth its weight in air.
The painful pour of relentless rain
eases my unrest.
Such healing beauty at its core.
This word is my best.
Your words paint a picture, Perfect! Now rain might just be my new best word. Thank you for posting this MrAlptraum!
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MrAlptraum said: Rain
Torrents of the sky's excess
drowning all beneath.
Washing sins of stubborn deserts;
that choose to wash in Sun.
The drops they race along my nose
then dive just to disperse.
A drop of cloud is all but long-lived,
but worth its weight in air.
The painful pour of relentless rain
eases my unrest.
Such healing beauty at its core.
This word is my best.
Painted a picture, Perfect! Now rain might just be my new best word. Thank you for posting this MrAlptraum!
Torrents of the sky's excess
drowning all beneath.
Washing sins of stubborn deserts;
that choose to wash in Sun.
The drops they race along my nose
then dive just to disperse.
A drop of cloud is all but long-lived,
but worth its weight in air.
The painful pour of relentless rain
eases my unrest.
Such healing beauty at its core.
This word is my best.
Painted a picture, Perfect! Now rain might just be my new best word. Thank you for posting this MrAlptraum!
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mitchryan549 said:Ocean
My ocean is an internal place,
full of the most unforgiving seas,
I reach blindly to grasp a lifeline
but there is no one here but me.
The sharks are swimming ever so close,
and I have expelled to them my crimson fluid
in the form of my private, primal prose,
and the end has become so lucid.
I'm swimming constantly, desperately seeking a shore,
but my body is wrecked from the fight.
With every stroke I cling to hope,
but there is nothing but ocean in sight.
The ocean inside of you is vast indeed,
but there is a shore, there always is! Yet another brilliant piece Ryan. You never slip up, do you? Thank you very much! (I'm a fan)
My ocean is an internal place,
full of the most unforgiving seas,
I reach blindly to grasp a lifeline
but there is no one here but me.
The sharks are swimming ever so close,
and I have expelled to them my crimson fluid
in the form of my private, primal prose,
and the end has become so lucid.
I'm swimming constantly, desperately seeking a shore,
but my body is wrecked from the fight.
With every stroke I cling to hope,
but there is nothing but ocean in sight.
The ocean inside of you is vast indeed,
but there is a shore, there always is! Yet another brilliant piece Ryan. You never slip up, do you? Thank you very much! (I'm a fan)
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UnleashedHeathen said:Hospital
I was bore here, helpless and screaming as I make my all but forbidden entrance
My life, passing me by as I am welcomed into Satin's realm
The clock is ticking as sickness, death, and new life surrounds my very being
Clean needles sterilize the tainted, Soft beds cradle the unstable,
Food carries the nearly unwanted beings
And yet, here I am entering a dimension where I soon will realize that I was never welcomed to
Hallway after hallway of people I don't recognize; people I will probably never meet
Room after room of nothing but wonder of tomorrows perceived life
Silent sorrows screaming help me, oh please help me out of this place
This is my second home
My third will carry me farther down the line of my destructive path
Lord knows I loathe hospitals. You introduced me to my nightmare. So much pain. You scared me. I won't thank you. But I'm grateful. Brilliant piece UnleashedHeaven!
I was bore here, helpless and screaming as I make my all but forbidden entrance
My life, passing me by as I am welcomed into Satin's realm
The clock is ticking as sickness, death, and new life surrounds my very being
Clean needles sterilize the tainted, Soft beds cradle the unstable,
Food carries the nearly unwanted beings
And yet, here I am entering a dimension where I soon will realize that I was never welcomed to
Hallway after hallway of people I don't recognize; people I will probably never meet
Room after room of nothing but wonder of tomorrows perceived life
Silent sorrows screaming help me, oh please help me out of this place
This is my second home
My third will carry me farther down the line of my destructive path
Lord knows I loathe hospitals. You introduced me to my nightmare. So much pain. You scared me. I won't thank you. But I'm grateful. Brilliant piece UnleashedHeaven!
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LeesAngel said:Down I go now, yet again
You let go now, but don’t tell me when
You enjoy it, willingly
You can feel it, while getting tingly
Your foot jerks fast, you catch my side
I take it as, the thanks you’ll hide
My pained look says, ‘Just you bloody frown’
But it’s the only way you would ever kick me when I’m down
if that's how it feels then We would all love to kick you when you're down!
This is brilliant! Thank you very much!
You let go now, but don’t tell me when
You enjoy it, willingly
You can feel it, while getting tingly
Your foot jerks fast, you catch my side
I take it as, the thanks you’ll hide
My pained look says, ‘Just you bloody frown’
But it’s the only way you would ever kick me when I’m down
if that's how it feels then We would all love to kick you when you're down!
This is brilliant! Thank you very much!
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I sincerely apologise to you all (MilkyWay in particular) for the error messages. I now know better than to come on here with a BlackBerry phone.
Yours sincerely,
Wanderer.
Yours sincerely,
Wanderer.