Poetry competition CLOSED 20th November 2013 3:17pm
WINNER
Gemini (Geminitalian)
Gemini (Geminitalian)
RUNNER-UP:
fred_r_kane
Almost Paradise
Poetry Contest Description
Near death experience, yours or others you know
Tell us about a near death experience that you had, or someone you know had. How did it effect you afterwards.
1: Not more than 300 words
2; Title your poem
3: No collaborations
4: New poems
Inviting DUP friends and family to join the competition.
1: Not more than 300 words
2; Title your poem
3: No collaborations
4: New poems
Inviting DUP friends and family to join the competition.
Anonymous
I will be back :)
Anonymous
Child’s Play
Light bulbs should not be replaced
While the lamp switch is on—
Death came knocking
I felt the shock wither away my cells
Effectively destroying the child life in me
And I heard the knock
I was weak, feeble
He shoved me into his darkness
And I drunk with black fog
But able to breathe
Smashed right through the window
Glass shards would not puncture
The black angel
As we made our way down into the depths
I began to hear whispers and laughter
“Children go here.”
I was thirsty and wanted my bottle
“There will plenty of bottles where you are going.”
Mommy’s bottle?
“None of that.”
Chocolate?
“Always and much more.”
Who are you? I asked.
A lost child, so to speak. He responded.
Where are your parents?
I had a father, he abandoned me.
Do you have kids?
You heard the laughter and felt the peace?
Yes.
My kids live there.
FLASH
My pupils grew small
The black angel disappeared
I woke up in my mother’s arms
Window in one piece
“You gave me quite a scare, don’t ever touch wires and light bulbs!”
Almost paradise
Paradise Lost.
Light bulbs should not be replaced
While the lamp switch is on—
Death came knocking
I felt the shock wither away my cells
Effectively destroying the child life in me
And I heard the knock
I was weak, feeble
He shoved me into his darkness
And I drunk with black fog
But able to breathe
Smashed right through the window
Glass shards would not puncture
The black angel
As we made our way down into the depths
I began to hear whispers and laughter
“Children go here.”
I was thirsty and wanted my bottle
“There will plenty of bottles where you are going.”
Mommy’s bottle?
“None of that.”
Chocolate?
“Always and much more.”
Who are you? I asked.
A lost child, so to speak. He responded.
Where are your parents?
I had a father, he abandoned me.
Do you have kids?
You heard the laughter and felt the peace?
Yes.
My kids live there.
FLASH
My pupils grew small
The black angel disappeared
I woke up in my mother’s arms
Window in one piece
“You gave me quite a scare, don’t ever touch wires and light bulbs!”
Almost paradise
Paradise Lost.
Anonymous
I sort of added a drama to it. I was a young boy and I got shocked and I woke up in my mother's arms. That night I remember dreaming about getting kidnapped by Death, but since I don't remember it in that much detail, I improvised, I hope that's alright.
Anonymous
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sw9618 said:I sort of added a drama to it. I was a young boy and I got shocked and I woke up in my mother's arms. That night I remember dreaming about getting kidnapped by Death, but since I don't remember it in that much detail, I improvised, I hope that's alright.
Its alright, of course; fictionalised true story, I'd call it. Thanks for kicking off the competition.
Its alright, of course; fictionalised true story, I'd call it. Thanks for kicking off the competition.
Anonymous
You thought it would be over,
I'm not sure why,
you must of thought no one
would attempt to save you,
stuck in your paradox mind.
Instead of cold skin
you got stiches
and couldn't understand
why you weren't in hell yet.
Welcome back
to paradise,
yeah, well, you could've died
but you're stuck here now,
so enjoy.
I'm not sure why,
you must of thought no one
would attempt to save you,
stuck in your paradox mind.
Instead of cold skin
you got stiches
and couldn't understand
why you weren't in hell yet.
Welcome back
to paradise,
yeah, well, you could've died
but you're stuck here now,
so enjoy.
[i]Near Death Experience (NDE)
Her eyes fluttered
her chest sank
they became frenzied
couldn't lose a patient
she watched them
and wished they would stop
she walked outside
and felt the sun
she touched a boy
who did not see her
but he shivered
held his jacket closer
then she coughed in pain
closed her eyes
and woke up to faces
of doctors and nurses...
[/i]
Anybody have similar stories? Send in your entry for this competition.
Her eyes fluttered
her chest sank
they became frenzied
couldn't lose a patient
she watched them
and wished they would stop
she walked outside
and felt the sun
she touched a boy
who did not see her
but he shivered
held his jacket closer
then she coughed in pain
closed her eyes
and woke up to faces
of doctors and nurses...
[/i]
Anybody have similar stories? Send in your entry for this competition.
"Deep Into My Vein"
I look in the mirror and I see a grown man
but deep inside my heart I’m still a little boy
so with this disconnect, my arm’s wrapped in a band
and deep into my vein, goes my most recent toy
I shoot my dope away, racing through my vein
Within only seconds, it takes away my pain
I nod out unconscious, peaceful and at ease
with a rig in my arm that might be diseased
but it doesn’t much matter, my skin has turned blue
and I’m walking through grass with its morning dew
I see a bright light shine through a tunnel
I think out loud, “the end of my troubles”
Then through my eyes, full of joyous tears
I see the souls I knew from my younger years
They stop me and tell me, “you can’t come in yet”
With this information, I start to get upset
“The Lord has plans for you” one of them said
“Search with your heart and don’t listen to your head”
So now I have a goal for which I’ll always strive
and instantly my body was coming back alive
I look in the mirror and I see a grown man
but deep inside my heart I’m still a little boy
so with this disconnect, my arm’s wrapped in a band
and deep into my vein, goes my most recent toy
I shoot my dope away, racing through my vein
Within only seconds, it takes away my pain
I nod out unconscious, peaceful and at ease
with a rig in my arm that might be diseased
but it doesn’t much matter, my skin has turned blue
and I’m walking through grass with its morning dew
I see a bright light shine through a tunnel
I think out loud, “the end of my troubles”
Then through my eyes, full of joyous tears
I see the souls I knew from my younger years
They stop me and tell me, “you can’t come in yet”
With this information, I start to get upset
“The Lord has plans for you” one of them said
“Search with your heart and don’t listen to your head”
So now I have a goal for which I’ll always strive
and instantly my body was coming back alive
I've cried,
You've lied
My spirit died
But who gives a fuck anymore?
They told me life goes on
Stop being a sad little song
My heart is cold black
I lost the feeling in my arms
It was you that caused me harm
I just helped
Almost dead
I cut too deep
But you saw the crimson red
You made me sick in the head
You got the message
That smile on my face
Maybe next time
I'll leave
Without a trace
You've lied
My spirit died
But who gives a fuck anymore?
They told me life goes on
Stop being a sad little song
My heart is cold black
I lost the feeling in my arms
It was you that caused me harm
I just helped
Almost dead
I cut too deep
But you saw the crimson red
You made me sick in the head
You got the message
That smile on my face
Maybe next time
I'll leave
Without a trace
