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Poetry about Dreams, Fantasy and Fiction
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
23rd Apr 2025 00:23am
23rd Apr 2025 00:23am
Kalamazoo Kathedral
Kracked-out, Kolostomy Konnection in Kalamazoo
Don't try and find me here
Last time I was in Kalamazoo
Someone tried to finger my rear
Kracked-out, Kolostomy Konnection in Kalamazoo
Kathedral has no flock
Last time I was in Kalamazoo
The priest tried to suck my kock
Kracked-out, Kolostomy Konnection in Kalamazoo
My backside is red and raw
Last time I was in Kalamazoo
My aunt is a part time whore
Kracked-out, Kolostomy Konnection in Kalamazoo
Religion is never on my mind
Last time my mother got naked here ...
Don't try and find me here
Last time I was in Kalamazoo
Someone tried to finger my rear
Kracked-out, Kolostomy Konnection in Kalamazoo
Kathedral has no flock
Last time I was in Kalamazoo
The priest tried to suck my kock
Kracked-out, Kolostomy Konnection in Kalamazoo
My backside is red and raw
Last time I was in Kalamazoo
My aunt is a part time whore
Kracked-out, Kolostomy Konnection in Kalamazoo
Religion is never on my mind
Last time my mother got naked here ...
#family
#happiness
#LifeChangingMoment
#TruthOfLife
#uplifting
55 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Apr 2025 00:51am
22nd Apr 2025 00:51am
Disappearing memories
They're the enemies of the mind
Trapped in the memory spectrum
No escape can I find
I'm always returning from the same old journeys
Every time they manage to break me
They steal my every heartbeat
Pain, anger, fear, a medley
Memory of them so bitter, so sweet
Every night the pictures I see
A painful tear never meant to be
Is only a memory of loss to me
I feel no remorse for leaving them behind
This downfall was their own fault
Bygone and existent, and imminent are now entwined
Forgetting them became my...
Trapped in the memory spectrum
No escape can I find
I'm always returning from the same old journeys
Every time they manage to break me
They steal my every heartbeat
Pain, anger, fear, a medley
Memory of them so bitter, so sweet
Every night the pictures I see
A painful tear never meant to be
Is only a memory of loss to me
I feel no remorse for leaving them behind
This downfall was their own fault
Bygone and existent, and imminent are now entwined
Forgetting them became my...
#memories
#MentalHealth
#sadness
67 reads
10 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
19th Apr 2025 9:06pm
19th Apr 2025 9:06pm
Sometimes it's just thoughts
It's me again the story teller of unspoken words ✍️ FOR what if you could find a place, that is disease free and protected, by a crystal dome. Would you want to leave and return back, to a world 🌎 that has become infected with so many peoples are losing there damn minds, that will affect even your own 🤨 well-being. What if you could find a pure source of energy, and with it came with a commitment and consistency, would you rather have that kind of mental health connection. 🤨 What if you could find a spiritual soul, that...
#emotional
#LifeChangingMoment
#philosophical
#PowerOfWords
#StreamOfConsciousness
69 reads
2 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
18th Apr 2025 11:17pm
18th Apr 2025 11:17pm
Do it for love
We all need and want a strong relationship with someone who knows what they want and need to sustain life and love and dreams. ❤️ FOR sure we will go through somethings, that will affect us in ways that will affect us mentally and emotionally and physically and spiritually. But regardless of what you have to go through, somethings are meant to be, as others are not meant to be, for they will appear in own lives like a smooth talking ENTITY. Coming with nothing but lies 😠 For sure it's necessary to know the difference, when we read between the lines of subliminal...
#gratitude
#hope
#kindness
#love
#strength
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ManorMyth
Man_Or_Myth
Man_Or_Myth
Poem Published
18th Apr 2025 9:59pm
18th Apr 2025 9:59pm
Jacob the hunter (Pt 3)
(It’s been some time since I last made an update to this story. Im looking for thoughts on tone and grammar)
“I know how it sounds, but trust me these savage beasts are real and I will rid this country of them by myself if I have to.” Jacob stares at the determination on Lilith’s face. “I can’t deny these claims you make does align with my goal. So, we can help one another until the goal is done and no further.” Staring at Lilith with his own determination, Jacob resolves himself to end the beast and have his revenge.
Back in town, as Sir Newborn frustratingly awaits...
“I know how it sounds, but trust me these savage beasts are real and I will rid this country of them by myself if I have to.” Jacob stares at the determination on Lilith’s face. “I can’t deny these claims you make does align with my goal. So, we can help one another until the goal is done and no further.” Staring at Lilith with his own determination, Jacob resolves himself to end the beast and have his revenge.
Back in town, as Sir Newborn frustratingly awaits...
#books
#fiction
#ShortStory #tragedy
#ShortStory #tragedy
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mrimac2008
mrimac
mrimac
Poem Published
18th Apr 2025 9:35pm
18th Apr 2025 9:35pm
the lost flies
A bunch of flies decided to fly till they see the light
Many obstacles came but despite all of them
They did not give up and managed to still go until they see a light
And of course the commitment did pay up making them, happy
Yet ,they still didn’t know there was a spider among the light
Flies continued to explore the light and still thought
The light was something mythical, they accepted it
Until the spider itself showed up and killed several brutally
Since the light was man made the heat killed many
Causing the flies to realize...
Many obstacles came but despite all of them
They did not give up and managed to still go until they see a light
And of course the commitment did pay up making them, happy
Yet ,they still didn’t know there was a spider among the light
Flies continued to explore the light and still thought
The light was something mythical, they accepted it
Until the spider itself showed up and killed several brutally
Since the light was man made the heat killed many
Causing the flies to realize...
#animals
#evolution
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0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
18th Apr 2025 00:13am
18th Apr 2025 00:13am
Down by the river
My one regret is the bloodline I derived from
I’m not a pedigree or a monkey’s uncle
My father is a penniless swami
My mother is a peace creep
We live up the river,
near a civil war battle ground
When there is a downwind,
the water has a polluted, toxic smell
A few years ago, I needed a pair of glasses
Never received them,
No insurance, no money!
My mother bitch slapped me a few times,
thinking that would help straighten my eyes out
Now I have short eyes!
Fuck, she’s dumb.
My brother, who is three years younger, ...
I’m not a pedigree or a monkey’s uncle
My father is a penniless swami
My mother is a peace creep
We live up the river,
near a civil war battle ground
When there is a downwind,
the water has a polluted, toxic smell
A few years ago, I needed a pair of glasses
Never received them,
No insurance, no money!
My mother bitch slapped me a few times,
thinking that would help straighten my eyes out
Now I have short eyes!
Fuck, she’s dumb.
My brother, who is three years younger, ...
#Easter
#family
#fiction
#poverty
#satirical
61 reads
4 Comments
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
17th Apr 2025 2:18pm
17th Apr 2025 2:18pm
Where am I?
In my dreams, I am flying.
Almost weightless; feeling free.
I find the small entrance to the vast unknown.
Hesitating for a moment,
my likeness remains on the periphery
frozen in time on the edge of the horizon.
My body floats, then falls,
rushing and accelerating.
An immense force pulls me taut
like a piece of spaghetti.
I hurtle, feet-first, through the darkness,
because somebody has turned out the light.
It's chaotic in here; crushing and stifling.
Am I speeding up or slowing down?
All I know is that I'm...
Almost weightless; feeling free.
I find the small entrance to the vast unknown.
Hesitating for a moment,
my likeness remains on the periphery
frozen in time on the edge of the horizon.
My body floats, then falls,
rushing and accelerating.
An immense force pulls me taut
like a piece of spaghetti.
I hurtle, feet-first, through the darkness,
because somebody has turned out the light.
It's chaotic in here; crushing and stifling.
Am I speeding up or slowing down?
All I know is that I'm...
#dreams
#myself
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0 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
15th Apr 2025 10:03pm
15th Apr 2025 10:03pm
A work of art
Ash to ash and dust to dust, we are only ENTITY'S of our former self, born to live only to die, like a precious flower 🌷 that only needs the Sun and Water to survive. But yet beneath the surface of our skin, as the blood flows through our veins inner locking our heart ❤️ to our brain 🧠 and to the deepness of our minds thoughts. 🤔 We are here and now in this space without time, to accept our fate and the spiritual subconsciousness of ourselves. For it's true that we are only human, and we have a choice of how we want to live our life story ✍️...
#LifeChangingMoment
#PersonalGrowth
#redemption
#StreamOfConsciousness
#uplifting
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
15th Apr 2025 8:35pm
15th Apr 2025 8:35pm
You Never Know When Murder Will Strike
After a night of some intense bowling, I saw this awesome pair of bowling shoes near the counter. They weren't black and red. They were yellow & blue.
Plus, they were my size.
The colors looked great!
I decided to snatch them.
Some pimply, out of shape manager with greasy, dandruff filled black hair stopped me right before exiting the building.
He said, "Sir, where are you going with those shoes?"
I said, "These are for me. Is that ok?"
He snatched them out my hand and said, "I never want to see you here ever again." ...
Plus, they were my size.
The colors looked great!
I decided to snatch them.
Some pimply, out of shape manager with greasy, dandruff filled black hair stopped me right before exiting the building.
He said, "Sir, where are you going with those shoes?"
I said, "These are for me. Is that ok?"
He snatched them out my hand and said, "I never want to see you here ever again." ...
#dreams
#fiction
#horror #ShortStory
#horror #ShortStory
69 reads
6 Comments
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
15th Apr 2025 5:57pm
15th Apr 2025 5:57pm
Univocalic (O)
Downtown Toronto,
shop front on dodgy block hosts groovy show.
How jolly!
Forty boho hobos, long of tooth,
toot obos, hoot horns,
clonk gongs, bop bongos.
Two bozos on obos of wood do solos—
two old boys on form!
Dozy hobos forgot words to songs
or how to hold gongs.
Horns now honk. OW!
How folky.
Boozy old hobo on bongos looks lost.
Bozo who owns dowdy wool hoody
flogs lots of goods
(CDs, on mono only - no promo!).
Now, no stock.
Odd-socks...
shop front on dodgy block hosts groovy show.
How jolly!
Forty boho hobos, long of tooth,
toot obos, hoot horns,
clonk gongs, bop bongos.
Two bozos on obos of wood do solos—
two old boys on form!
Dozy hobos forgot words to songs
or how to hold gongs.
Horns now honk. OW!
How folky.
Boozy old hobo on bongos looks lost.
Bozo who owns dowdy wool hoody
flogs lots of goods
(CDs, on mono only - no promo!).
Now, no stock.
Odd-socks...
#morality
#music
54 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Apr 2025 7:46pm
14th Apr 2025 7:46pm
Mr. Woody
Distraught over the belief that his wife was having an affair, Poppa Woody of Canada cut off his own penis & testicles with a kitchen knife in 2016. Unfortunately for him, he lived. Mrs. Woody denied ever having an affair. Since Mr. Woody's sex life hasn't been the same, Mrs. Woody currently seeks men to fulfill her sexual wants and desires. Mr. Woody understands and excepts his wife's lifestyle!
#fiction
#heartbroken
#ignorance
#satirical
#sex
86 reads
4 Comments
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