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Forehead kisses from two lovely bricks (HAIKU)
Blunt corners kiss fierce
An uninvited harsh pierce
Bright light permeates
Warm trickling blood
coats everything with grace
down upon my face
Staples replenish
Sixteen stitches to finish
Her scars now mark me
New walks of new fates
awaiting always for me
I can hardly wait
for our next embrace
pure love expressed within hate
Haste never a waste
An uninvited harsh pierce
Bright light permeates
Warm trickling blood
coats everything with grace
down upon my face
Staples replenish
Sixteen stitches to finish
Her scars now mark me
New walks of new fates
awaiting always for me
I can hardly wait
for our next embrace
pure love expressed within hate
Haste never a waste
Published 26th Sep 2017
| Edited 4th Nov 2017
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26th Sep 2017 10:14pm
WOw - I loved these - all of them but 1 and 3 really stood out for me :-)
excellent work my friend :-)
excellent work my friend :-)
27th Sep 2017 1:22am
27th Sep 2017 2:18am
Thank you for your comments. They weren't the same brick and occurred at different times. There's just something about that dizzy concussion feel and blood splattering all over the pavement and yourself that makes me feel strangely alive, as if I actually still am .
28th Sep 2017 8:45am
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1st Oct 2017 1:59am
No sleep for you in the next 24 hours. Short, intense and vividly
made me say uuugh...OUCH..
jeezzz
made me say uuugh...OUCH..
jeezzz
i like this...#1 & #3
ya know, this would make a "sweet ass song" : )
shit ARCH, just noticed the pic, hell that's a dinger!
ya know, this would make a "sweet ass song" : )
shit ARCH, just noticed the pic, hell that's a dinger!
3rd Oct 2017 2:08am
Thank you everyone for the input. Pointing out that haiku #1 and #3 were the ones that stuck out is a very helpful critique.
I appreciate the likes and the useful comments.
I appreciate the likes and the useful comments.
8th Oct 2017 4:09am
