Poetry competition CLOSED 2nd May 2016 3:25am
WINNER
Anonymous
Anonymous
RUNNERS-UP:
LobodeSanPedro
and _shadoe_
I Like Big Books!
The catcher in the rye
The little ones who lie
The man from the store
The wretch and the whore
A penny keeper
A professional sleeper
All here and not sure why
Just told they'd better comply
And if I may, if I might
Be afraid of my fright
To turn away just in time
Hoping I'm not next in line
As all the hands one by one
Pick up this single-load gun
And do precisely as they're told
Or else face a scream and scold
To take a shot without a word
Mercilessly, to kill a mockingbird
The catcher in the rye~ J.D Salinger
To kill a mockingbird~ Harper Lee
The little ones who lie
The man from the store
The wretch and the whore
A penny keeper
A professional sleeper
All here and not sure why
Just told they'd better comply
And if I may, if I might
Be afraid of my fright
To turn away just in time
Hoping I'm not next in line
As all the hands one by one
Pick up this single-load gun
And do precisely as they're told
Or else face a scream and scold
To take a shot without a word
Mercilessly, to kill a mockingbird
The catcher in the rye~ J.D Salinger
To kill a mockingbird~ Harper Lee
Anonymous
As We Are Now
Existing as we do
separately together
travelling on planes
sometimes intangible
fanciful flights
where we touch
down deep
find links that connect
one to another
across boundaries
borders and oceans
where miles don't matter
there's no such place as far away
As We Are Now: A Novel, May Sarton
There's No Such Place as Far Away, by Richard Bach, H. Lee Shapiro
Existing as we do
separately together
travelling on planes
sometimes intangible
fanciful flights
where we touch
down deep
find links that connect
one to another
across boundaries
borders and oceans
where miles don't matter
there's no such place as far away
As We Are Now: A Novel, May Sarton
There's No Such Place as Far Away, by Richard Bach, H. Lee Shapiro
Questions about angels,
I can't think of one.
How they fly around on wings
Like the birds have done.
With the clouds, in and out.
And halos, what's that all about?
They're shown, wearing cotton robes,
As buxom girls with golden hair.
That doesn't get me anywhere,
As when I think internally.
For certain, that's the way I feel,
It's a theoretical pain;
I'm always left out in the rain.
©2016 Jade Pandora. All Rights Reserved
"Questions About Angels" by Billy Collins
"Left Out in the Rain" by Gary Snyder
I can't think of one.
How they fly around on wings
Like the birds have done.
With the clouds, in and out.
And halos, what's that all about?
They're shown, wearing cotton robes,
As buxom girls with golden hair.
That doesn't get me anywhere,
As when I think internally.
For certain, that's the way I feel,
It's a theoretical pain;
I'm always left out in the rain.
©2016 Jade Pandora. All Rights Reserved
"Questions About Angels" by Billy Collins
"Left Out in the Rain" by Gary Snyder
Cinder
The cinders burn so bright,
So alive,
The days passing too short,
Too cold,
The flames flicker so hungrily,
So starved,
Filled with burnt up wood,
Dying coals,
All we have is exhausted fire,
Fading smoke,
And all we have left,
Is winter.
cinder/ winter- the lunar chronicles by marissa meyer
The cinders burn so bright,
So alive,
The days passing too short,
Too cold,
The flames flicker so hungrily,
So starved,
Filled with burnt up wood,
Dying coals,
All we have is exhausted fire,
Fading smoke,
And all we have left,
Is winter.
cinder/ winter- the lunar chronicles by marissa meyer
calamitygin said:Nuthin for lil ol me? This went on several rL....either they are wrong...or you are. But i don't give a shit what i think about the writer...i am fair in my comps.
Sorry doll, you said not to PM you any more, so I didn't. You already know my preferences for editing pieces. You didn't quite follow the comp instructions, you still have time to edit btw.
I comment, either on the thread or via PM when something strikes me, for decent but not striking pieces, I don't usually comment.
Since you seem to be asking, your piece is cute but not something I would RL, it's a matter of subjective tastes as are all pieces and as is the judging of comps. There have been many comps that the chosen winner was not whom I thought had the best piece and I'm sure that will probably be the case with this comp for others.
If you'd like to discuss starting, running, judging and commenting on comps, begin a thread, I'll gladly share my thoughts on the issue there.
Sorry doll, you said not to PM you any more, so I didn't. You already know my preferences for editing pieces. You didn't quite follow the comp instructions, you still have time to edit btw.
I comment, either on the thread or via PM when something strikes me, for decent but not striking pieces, I don't usually comment.
Since you seem to be asking, your piece is cute but not something I would RL, it's a matter of subjective tastes as are all pieces and as is the judging of comps. There have been many comps that the chosen winner was not whom I thought had the best piece and I'm sure that will probably be the case with this comp for others.
If you'd like to discuss starting, running, judging and commenting on comps, begin a thread, I'll gladly share my thoughts on the issue there.
