Poetry competition CLOSED 2nd May 2016 3:25am
WINNER
Anonymous
Anonymous
RUNNERS-UP:
LobodeSanPedro
and _shadoe_
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Hepcat61
geoff cat
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geoff cat
Dangerous Mind
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Stranger in a Strange Land
(a sonnet)
No one can hear the voices in my head
No one can hope to understand the noise
No one can know the ways I chose instead
No one can help the person it destroys
It’s been this way at least since I was ten
Their constantly debating forth and back
But when I drank it stopped, but only then
And then I’d wake to know their full attack
But forty years of this and something more
Have brought me to the place where answers are
I’m sick not broken like I thought before
I can get well with help that’s worked so far.
Then one more place to go where love’s bestowed
With her and where I’m headed on the road.
"Stranger in a Strange Land" by Robert Heinlein
"On the Road" by Jack Kerouac
(a sonnet)
No one can hear the voices in my head
No one can hope to understand the noise
No one can know the ways I chose instead
No one can help the person it destroys
It’s been this way at least since I was ten
Their constantly debating forth and back
But when I drank it stopped, but only then
And then I’d wake to know their full attack
But forty years of this and something more
Have brought me to the place where answers are
I’m sick not broken like I thought before
I can get well with help that’s worked so far.
Then one more place to go where love’s bestowed
With her and where I’m headed on the road.
"Stranger in a Strange Land" by Robert Heinlein
"On the Road" by Jack Kerouac
Trixareforkids
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Dangerous Mind
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Geoff, I love your choice for the title book 😀 I did a book report on Stranger In A Strange Land in 9th grade. The teacher was appalled at my choice of reading material, lol. I still have that and many more of his on my bookshelf. Somehow I've never gotten around to reading On the Road.
Sonnets are a huge PITA for me, much respect 😎
Sonnets are a huge PITA for me, much respect 😎
Hepcat61
geoff cat
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geoff cat
Dangerous Mind
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Joined 27th Nov 2015Forum Posts: 1028
Stranger in a Strange Land and Time Enough for Love were two of my favorite books at the time... before things turned weird and paranoid and I started reading all those Philip K. Dick stories...
As for the sonnet, I bow, they are my chosen form...
As for the sonnet, I bow, they are my chosen form...
Trixareforkids
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Dangerous Mind
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This was a tough choice for me. Congrats Calli, I felt your piece was the seamless from title to end, the emotions expressed in such a simple and controlled way made them even more powerful for me.
Lobo, really great piece, I love the story, the flow, the feel and your ball in gave me a big grin. Another excellent piece.
Katja, your piece grabbed me, it had a great 50's noir film feel for me and I love the idea presented that our expectations about children have nothing to do with who our children are or become.
Lobo, really great piece, I love the story, the flow, the feel and your ball in gave me a big grin. Another excellent piece.
Katja, your piece grabbed me, it had a great 50's noir film feel for me and I love the idea presented that our expectations about children have nothing to do with who our children are or become.
LobodeSanPedro
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Tyrant of Words
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Congrats Lyricalli and Katja ... Solid ink! Thanks Trix for providing a springboard to dive into this ever changing world, I truly enjoyed the exercise.
Trixareforkids
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Dangerous Mind
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Joined 2nd Jan 2016Forum Posts: 2597
Anonymous
Trixareforkids said:This was a tough choice for me. Congrats Calli, I felt your piece was the seamless from title to end, the emotions expressed in such a simple and controlled way made them even more powerful for me.
Thank you! Your bookend form is such an inspired idea, and a fun challenge to write. The second title grabbed me as an end line, and it took a bit to settle on a title and get from point A to point B.
Congratulations Lobo and Katja! Such good pieces.
And, Honey, I have to say I adored yours.
Thank you! Your bookend form is such an inspired idea, and a fun challenge to write. The second title grabbed me as an end line, and it took a bit to settle on a title and get from point A to point B.
Congratulations Lobo and Katja! Such good pieces.
And, Honey, I have to say I adored yours.
JohnnyBlaze
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Tyrant of Words
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Uggh .... skunked again!
Congrats Calli. I'll trade you that trophy for the avatar you desperately need.
Congrats Calli. I'll trade you that trophy for the avatar you desperately need.
Honeyadored
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Twisted Dreamer
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Well done Calli, Lobo and Shadoe.
Thanks for organising the challenge Trix.
Thanks for organising the challenge Trix.
_shadoe_
yiyi
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yiyi
Tyrant of Words
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heartfelt congrats to both calli {&} lsp...
... thank you for hosting, trix ^.^ enjoyed this one heaps & bunches
... thank you for hosting, trix ^.^ enjoyed this one heaps & bunches
Trixareforkids
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Dangerous Mind
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Joined 2nd Jan 2016Forum Posts: 2597
Thank you to everyone that entered. Fun to me is peeking at other people's bookshelves and y'all didn't disappoint.
Honeyadored
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'And, Honey, I have to say I adored yours. '
Opps! Only just spotted your comment Calli, glad you liked it and thanks for saying hun