Poems About Nightmares Seeking Honest Critique
#nightmares
Poems about nightmares seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Silent knot
In the quiet hours when sleep eludes,
being awake for long, through the night.
A scent emerges, twisting in the air,
the strange smell of something burning.
Eyes wide open, thoughts begin to unravel,
the mind plays tricks in the absence of rest.
Is it fatigue or dreams left behind?
This scent, a whisper on the edge of awareness.
Senses sharpen in the haze of wakefulness,
reality blurs in the long hours of night.
The burnt smell, a ghostly presence,
a reminder of the body’s need for rest.
In these...
being awake for long, through the night.
A scent emerges, twisting in the air,
the strange smell of something burning.
Eyes wide open, thoughts begin to unravel,
the mind plays tricks in the absence of rest.
Is it fatigue or dreams left behind?
This scent, a whisper on the edge of awareness.
Senses sharpen in the haze of wakefulness,
reality blurs in the long hours of night.
The burnt smell, a ghostly presence,
a reminder of the body’s need for rest.
In these...
#anxiety
#insomnia
#nightmares
#scary
#sleep
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There is so much more
I see a light shining ever so brightly.
Shall I take time, address it in cleverness politely?
I bow before something far beyond the fleshly.
He tells me not to bow and only gently he reminds me.
I am your passage not your keeper, not your friend.
Sent by Him who is to take you where you haven't been.
My head spun in fright as he stood up to his full hight; his body shone like the sunshine.
Please do not fear me sir, I've only come to guide you.
Where we will go is hell unknown to mortals who appear here.
Downwards I continued until hell I...
Shall I take time, address it in cleverness politely?
I bow before something far beyond the fleshly.
He tells me not to bow and only gently he reminds me.
I am your passage not your keeper, not your friend.
Sent by Him who is to take you where you haven't been.
My head spun in fright as he stood up to his full hight; his body shone like the sunshine.
Please do not fear me sir, I've only come to guide you.
Where we will go is hell unknown to mortals who appear here.
Downwards I continued until hell I...
#hell
#nightmares
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Veiled Love
The true depths of selfishness
I had never touched
Until I met you
Never feeling its cuts,
I could never have knew
Just how bladed it was
Victim after victim, a gluttonous lust
Seeming to serve you all that you want
While feeding on your primal thoughts
Stripping the essence from all that you love
Instilling the eternal instinct of one
caught in the grip of sadness
I was dragged into a fiery realm
my tears white with phosphorus
Burning holes through my skin as they fell
These iron chains
Forged...
I had never touched
Until I met you
Never feeling its cuts,
I could never have knew
Just how bladed it was
Victim after victim, a gluttonous lust
Seeming to serve you all that you want
While feeding on your primal thoughts
Stripping the essence from all that you love
Instilling the eternal instinct of one
caught in the grip of sadness
I was dragged into a fiery realm
my tears white with phosphorus
Burning holes through my skin as they fell
These iron chains
Forged...
#bittersweet
#courage
#heartbroken
#nightmares
#suffering
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In My Dreams
I see you running in my nightmares
You try to hide but I will find you
I toss and turn in my sleep
As I hold this dagger and gently weep
I don't know why I dream this
I don't know why I see this
I don't know why I miss this
No god can help me with this
Please.... Please... Please...
Somebody... Help me
I see you dying in my dreams
As I take your life tonight
You will suffer and I will win
Now I live with this sin
I wish this was someone else
But I cannot help what I truly desire
I just wanted you...
You try to hide but I will find you
I toss and turn in my sleep
As I hold this dagger and gently weep
I don't know why I dream this
I don't know why I see this
I don't know why I miss this
No god can help me with this
Please.... Please... Please...
Somebody... Help me
I see you dying in my dreams
As I take your life tonight
You will suffer and I will win
Now I live with this sin
I wish this was someone else
But I cannot help what I truly desire
I just wanted you...
#dark
#death
#dreams
#lover
#nightmares
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Eyes Ablaze
This fury within…
Eyes ablaze with the hellfire from within.
Once a soul within, it has long burned
into a pile of ash which smolders on,
but it will never come back to me.
I understand my body thus is no more
than a rotten edifice waiting to finally collapse.
Eyes ablaze with the hellfire from within.
Once a soul within, it has long burned
into a pile of ash which smolders on,
but it will never come back to me.
I understand my body thus is no more
than a rotten edifice waiting to finally collapse.
#anger
#dark
#MentalHealth
#nightmares
#surreal
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Avoid Processed Foods!
Take my order while you serve me
I don't like you or this food
How I got here, Not to sure
One bad trip, unlocked this door
I'm not feeling so fine
My stomach is cursed,
I committed a crime
Take me to that place where the elephants flew
Dolphins walked, swimming kangaroo's
I wouldn't mind if they all spoke to me
Maybe like playing charades
Sharks burrowing in trees
I've visited this place a few times in the last week
I needed a passport to meet with myself
He didn't understand me, I don't speak Greek...
I don't like you or this food
How I got here, Not to sure
One bad trip, unlocked this door
I'm not feeling so fine
My stomach is cursed,
I committed a crime
Take me to that place where the elephants flew
Dolphins walked, swimming kangaroo's
I wouldn't mind if they all spoke to me
Maybe like playing charades
Sharks burrowing in trees
I've visited this place a few times in the last week
I needed a passport to meet with myself
He didn't understand me, I don't speak Greek...
#food
#illness
#nightmares
#TruthOfLife
#utopia
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Hear It Calling
Beneath the loam, where silence breeds
A shadow stirs in restless plight
I buried him, my crime unheeds
Yet feel his clawing in the night
His voice, a rasp through fetid air
A specter’s hymn, a curse untamed
It bids me down the stairs in despair
Yet no tongue speaks the damned unnamed
Scratch, scratch beneath the floor’s tight grain
The boards do shudder at his call
Each groan and creak becomes a chain
That binds my soul to rise and fall
The grave exhales its rancid breath
A miasma cold, my guilt laid bare ...
A shadow stirs in restless plight
I buried him, my crime unheeds
Yet feel his clawing in the night
His voice, a rasp through fetid air
A specter’s hymn, a curse untamed
It bids me down the stairs in despair
Yet no tongue speaks the damned unnamed
Scratch, scratch beneath the floor’s tight grain
The boards do shudder at his call
Each groan and creak becomes a chain
That binds my soul to rise and fall
The grave exhales its rancid breath
A miasma cold, my guilt laid bare ...
#death
#narrative
#night
#nightmares
#shadows
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Dream, Nightmare, You Decide
I'm living at my parents house
An old girlfriend is living their too
I don't know this until she comes out of a room
She looks at me and asks me if I'm living here and I say yes
She & my mother begin laughing in my face
They then drive away in my father's RV.
An old girlfriend is living their too
I don't know this until she comes out of a room
She looks at me and asks me if I'm living here and I say yes
She & my mother begin laughing in my face
They then drive away in my father's RV.
#dreams
#girlfriend
#home
#mother
#nightmares
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The Storm
The Storm”
The mechanical noise starts up.
He hears it.
Feels it.
It is coming slowly up the hallway
to his room.
It is a dark and stormy night.
That all too famous line.
And it has come back to him tonight.
It has come back to say, “Boo!” and laugh.
“I love you,” it says.
Little green man.
Muscular, little green man
slips through the closet door,
back out now looking at him,
then to the hallway
and back to him with a worried face.
It is coming closer and little green man ...
The mechanical noise starts up.
He hears it.
Feels it.
It is coming slowly up the hallway
to his room.
It is a dark and stormy night.
That all too famous line.
And it has come back to him tonight.
It has come back to say, “Boo!” and laugh.
“I love you,” it says.
Little green man.
Muscular, little green man
slips through the closet door,
back out now looking at him,
then to the hallway
and back to him with a worried face.
It is coming closer and little green man ...
#dark
#nightmares
#scary
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Prince Of Darkness
I smoke in ways in purple haze
You are on my blacklist
Phase by phase, I'll set ablaze
Firing up this red mist
I'll watch you cry through haunted eyes
The dark has turned you into
Ashes die, you've broken ties
I really fuckin' hate you
You are on my blacklist
Phase by phase, I'll set ablaze
Firing up this red mist
I'll watch you cry through haunted eyes
The dark has turned you into
Ashes die, you've broken ties
I really fuckin' hate you
#curse
#nightmares
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Falling in a Dream
Falling in a dream
Catch myself drifting between
Almost asleep and about to dream
In that fleeting moment I realize
And try to catch myself
From falling into nightmares of my dreams
Access consciousness of my inner Id
Slices of life with some fiction mixed in
Or a piece of your fear comes to bear
Sometimes it’s so good try to fall back and pick up the story again
Or wake up in a panic sweat on your pillow
Parts of your past become ever present
A dream is of future time
Baked into your...
Catch myself drifting between
Almost asleep and about to dream
In that fleeting moment I realize
And try to catch myself
From falling into nightmares of my dreams
Access consciousness of my inner Id
Slices of life with some fiction mixed in
Or a piece of your fear comes to bear
Sometimes it’s so good try to fall back and pick up the story again
Or wake up in a panic sweat on your pillow
Parts of your past become ever present
A dream is of future time
Baked into your...
#dreams
#nightmares
#sleep
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Lost Traveler
Let's pretend
I traveled over a bend
I went back in time
For no reason or rhyme
To be caught and tried
For someone else's lie
My sentence was death
Uttered under someone's breath
I will not go easy into the night
Once the moon is full I will see the whole site
There are men, women, children and aged souls
All out to see the penalty dolled
I'll be the last to go
Making me witness this horrible show
One was...
I traveled over a bend
I went back in time
For no reason or rhyme
To be caught and tried
For someone else's lie
My sentence was death
Uttered under someone's breath
I will not go easy into the night
Once the moon is full I will see the whole site
There are men, women, children and aged souls
All out to see the penalty dolled
I'll be the last to go
Making me witness this horrible show
One was...
#nightmares
#Halloween
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DU Poetry : Poems About Nightmares Seeking Honest Critique