Poems About Despair Seeking Honest Critique
#despair
Poems about despair seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
poet5678
CHUCKLES 123
CHUCKLES 123
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:35pm
Yesterday 5:35pm
Foi Deus
Foi Deus
That made us
With his holy hands
Many years ago
Foi Deus
That placed us here
On earth to live
For a long time
We just love to live
On earth
Meu Deus
Also you have the power
In your hands to heal the sick
Yes the sick people
Have been calling for you
Please go and heal them
Because you have the power to heal
I am sure
Meu Deus
The sick is always praying for you
Every single night
Before they go to sleep
Yes they sleep all through the night
Without waking up
And they...
That made us
With his holy hands
Many years ago
Foi Deus
That placed us here
On earth to live
For a long time
We just love to live
On earth
Meu Deus
Also you have the power
In your hands to heal the sick
Yes the sick people
Have been calling for you
Please go and heal them
Because you have the power to heal
I am sure
Meu Deus
The sick is always praying for you
Every single night
Before they go to sleep
Yes they sleep all through the night
Without waking up
And they...
#bittersweet
#denial
#despair
#emptiness
#fear
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
13th Jan 2025 10:49am
13th Jan 2025 10:49am
Ocean Blue Dreams
There is a figure I sometimes see in my dreams.
With blue eyes,ocean screens.
Sometimes, I meet him in my dreamscape.
Something like an escape.
From reality,cheapskate.
And when I am with him,it feels like fate.
If only I could transport to that realm as I please.
He would be real.
He would be by my side,and ask me how I feel.
His identity is unknown.
But to me,he's an old friend.
I don't see him often.
But we manage to make amends.
Like the time we went on a vacation far away.
Or the time we got...
With blue eyes,ocean screens.
Sometimes, I meet him in my dreamscape.
Something like an escape.
From reality,cheapskate.
And when I am with him,it feels like fate.
If only I could transport to that realm as I please.
He would be real.
He would be by my side,and ask me how I feel.
His identity is unknown.
But to me,he's an old friend.
I don't see him often.
But we manage to make amends.
Like the time we went on a vacation far away.
Or the time we got...
#despair
#FallingInLove
#hope
#love
#sadness
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Pete_25
Poem Published
13th Jan 2025 9:08am
13th Jan 2025 9:08am
Show
(S)miles of fun
It's all a show
Away, the sadness
No one knows
Watching him
You wouldn't guess
Playing the clown
Leaves him anxious
~ distressed
It's all a show
Away, the sadness
No one knows
Watching him
You wouldn't guess
Playing the clown
Leaves him anxious
~ distressed
#anxiety
#despair
#emptiness #sadness
#emptiness #sadness
55 reads
14 Comments
Gorotika
Poem Published
13th Jan 2025 1:36am
13th Jan 2025 1:36am
Expiration date
#dark
#death
#depression
#despair
#suicide
28 reads
1 Comment
PAR
Poem Published
12th Jan 2025 5:57pm
12th Jan 2025 5:57pm
Across the Land
For even on the highway to hell,
no redemption is found.
The detour leads deeper
where shadows confound.
No solace, no escape,
just eternal descent
Into the abyss
where suffering is sent.
no redemption is found.
The detour leads deeper
where shadows confound.
No solace, no escape,
just eternal descent
Into the abyss
where suffering is sent.
#angels
#dark
#despair
#heaven
#hell
47 reads
8 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
9th Jan 2025 10:49am
9th Jan 2025 10:49am
I Don't Know
I don't know if it's just the way I feel.
The way I have been,or slowly heal.
I don't know if it's something I have seen.
But sometimes,I wish for something I've never been.
Yearning to feel those memories once more.
I don't know if I just fell on the floor.
Or if I had t actually walk out the door.
Maybe it's something I drank or ate.
Maybe it's destiny or fate.
I don't know if I ate something wrong.
But I feel broken like a love song.
I don't see if it's something I drank.
I want to be frank,not blank. ...
The way I have been,or slowly heal.
I don't know if it's something I have seen.
But sometimes,I wish for something I've never been.
Yearning to feel those memories once more.
I don't know if I just fell on the floor.
Or if I had t actually walk out the door.
Maybe it's something I drank or ate.
Maybe it's destiny or fate.
I don't know if I ate something wrong.
But I feel broken like a love song.
I don't see if it's something I drank.
I want to be frank,not blank. ...
#despair
#hope
#motivational #sadness
#motivational #sadness
58 reads
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Nvmb
Poem Published
8th Jan 2025 2:18pm
8th Jan 2025 2:18pm
Eclipseing Me
Your whispers fill the hollow air,
A hymn that binds, a wordless snare.
You’re not a god, but I kneel still,
A shadow draped in quiet will.
Your touch is poison laced in gold,
A promise ancient, silent, cold.
And I am nothing—just a vessel,
Your voice, a hymn I dare not wrestle.
Take me—
Unmake me—
Let the void flood my veins,
'Til the silence becomes my name.
Shape me—
Erase me—
Every thought you claim as your own,
And I fall into you, alone.
I trace the lines you carved in me,
A map of...
A hymn that binds, a wordless snare.
You’re not a god, but I kneel still,
A shadow draped in quiet will.
Your touch is poison laced in gold,
A promise ancient, silent, cold.
And I am nothing—just a vessel,
Your voice, a hymn I dare not wrestle.
Take me—
Unmake me—
Let the void flood my veins,
'Til the silence becomes my name.
Shape me—
Erase me—
Every thought you claim as your own,
And I fall into you, alone.
I trace the lines you carved in me,
A map of...
#apathy
#confusion
#dark
#despair
#emptiness
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0 Comments
Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
6th Jan 2025 10:50pm
6th Jan 2025 10:50pm
The Train Crossing
High above the valleys ridge
A lonely track across the bridge
A bridge of angry pain and sorrow
Where trains will pass into tomorrow
Half way across, a spectacular view
A lifetime of mistakes I now undo
Underneath the bright sunlight
Regrets laid down and kissed good night
Relaxing in the refreshing air
Into the eternal abyss I now stare
That final moment of peace and clarity
Internal forgiveness and self therapy
My ears against the cold train tracks
An introspection I can't turn back
Silence...
A lonely track across the bridge
A bridge of angry pain and sorrow
Where trains will pass into tomorrow
Half way across, a spectacular view
A lifetime of mistakes I now undo
Underneath the bright sunlight
Regrets laid down and kissed good night
Relaxing in the refreshing air
Into the eternal abyss I now stare
That final moment of peace and clarity
Internal forgiveness and self therapy
My ears against the cold train tracks
An introspection I can't turn back
Silence...
#despair
#emptiness
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PAR
Poem Published
6th Jan 2025 10:44am
6th Jan 2025 10:44am
Pain au Chocolat
In shadows deep, where whispers coil,
a demon's heart, a restless soil.
Desire stirs in darkest night,
to seize the power, to taste no bright.
Yearning for control, unseen,
in minds and hearts where fears convene.
Chaos beckons its sweet embrace
to twist the calm, leave not a trace.
In every tear, in every scream,
fueling nightmares, shattering dreams.
A dance of torment, endless fire,
feeding on the souls that dry.
Power sought in realms of pain.
A demon’s thirst, a crimson stain.
Corruption's...
a demon's heart, a restless soil.
Desire stirs in darkest night,
to seize the power, to taste no bright.
Yearning for control, unseen,
in minds and hearts where fears convene.
Chaos beckons its sweet embrace
to twist the calm, leave not a trace.
In every tear, in every scream,
fueling nightmares, shattering dreams.
A dance of torment, endless fire,
feeding on the souls that dry.
Power sought in realms of pain.
A demon’s thirst, a crimson stain.
Corruption's...
#dark
#desert
#despair
#mirror
#suffering
52 reads
9 Comments
MalcolmG
Poem Published
6th Jan 2025 2:47am
6th Jan 2025 2:47am
Forgotten World
These barren cries whisper plains,
Despair. This silence, artic, yet brightens refrain.
Hushed dreams glisten; they surge, then blooming,
Horizons where shadows dance, fading into softly.
Despair. This silence, artic, yet brightens refrain,
Grainy laughter spins through sands of grains.
Horizons where shadows dance, fading into softly,
Seamless yet prickled, tender echoes still seas.
Grainy laughter spins through sands of grains,
Turquoise dawns flood sepia skies.
Seamless yet prickled, tender echoes still seas, ...
Despair. This silence, artic, yet brightens refrain.
Hushed dreams glisten; they surge, then blooming,
Horizons where shadows dance, fading into softly.
Despair. This silence, artic, yet brightens refrain,
Grainy laughter spins through sands of grains.
Horizons where shadows dance, fading into softly,
Seamless yet prickled, tender echoes still seas.
Grainy laughter spins through sands of grains,
Turquoise dawns flood sepia skies.
Seamless yet prickled, tender echoes still seas, ...
#despair
#hope
#rebirth
60 reads
5 Comments
Poet__2248
Poem Published
3rd Jan 2025 3:59pm
3rd Jan 2025 3:59pm
Block your ears
Do not look me when you cut
When you scissor and saw my flesh
When you chisel my bones
and wrap my hair
Do not swap my flesh for plastic
Do not fill my cheeks with youth you've crafted from mulch
Or sculpt my teeth with metal
Do not force me to watch
Her mock her adult body
Or hear you sneer with hatred
At her crying
Do not inject my chest with sweetener
Or my bum with fat
Block her ears so she do not hear to your whining
Your insecure complaints
About appearance and age
As I did
When you scissor and saw my flesh
When you chisel my bones
and wrap my hair
Do not swap my flesh for plastic
Do not fill my cheeks with youth you've crafted from mulch
Or sculpt my teeth with metal
Do not force me to watch
Her mock her adult body
Or hear you sneer with hatred
At her crying
Do not inject my chest with sweetener
Or my bum with fat
Block her ears so she do not hear to your whining
Your insecure complaints
About appearance and age
As I did
#anger
#apocalypse
#despair
#frustration
#greed
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poet5678
CHUCKLES 123
CHUCKLES 123
Poem Published
2nd Jan 2025 10:45am
2nd Jan 2025 10:45am
I will not make promises
I will not make promises
For you that I can't keep
I will not be jealous of you
Because you have more
Then me
I don't need the things you have
You worked hard to get
The things you have
Also, you collect some stones
From the sea
I know that you are a sea lover
Also, you spend most of you days
At the sea
I will also treat you
With respect
I am not telling you lies
My dearest friend
I will not disturb you
When you are sleeping
Because you need your sleep
Also, I am an honest person
That you...
For you that I can't keep
I will not be jealous of you
Because you have more
Then me
I don't need the things you have
You worked hard to get
The things you have
Also, you collect some stones
From the sea
I know that you are a sea lover
Also, you spend most of you days
At the sea
I will also treat you
With respect
I am not telling you lies
My dearest friend
I will not disturb you
When you are sleeping
Because you need your sleep
Also, I am an honest person
That you...
#anxiety
#denial
#despair
#disappointment
#jealousy
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