Poems About Despair Seeking Honest Critique
#despair
Poems about despair seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Josiah
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:46am
Yesterday 4:46am
Sanatorium
Florescent tube lights lead the way down such lonely halls
Listen, along hushed anxious mumbles, echoing these walls
Their greenish dronings merely soften a shadow's firm grip
Trails in asbestos tile, slates etched by trauma's deep chips
Time whispers me in aside, upon decades, feelings of truth
A dark nostalgia or subtle ageless grief, it can not soothe
Morbid satisfaction, like night cigarettes, bids me to stay
These haunted halls, lonesome, mournfully push me away
Listen, along hushed anxious mumbles, echoing these walls
Their greenish dronings merely soften a shadow's firm grip
Trails in asbestos tile, slates etched by trauma's deep chips
Time whispers me in aside, upon decades, feelings of truth
A dark nostalgia or subtle ageless grief, it can not soothe
Morbid satisfaction, like night cigarettes, bids me to stay
These haunted halls, lonesome, mournfully push me away
#despair
#emptiness
#loneliness #NaPoWriMo2024
#loneliness #NaPoWriMo2024
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0 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:00am
Yesterday 1:00am
On Suffering
Some kinds of suffering will make people mentally stronger
While needless torment can be just a waste of time
Useless afflictions will numb some folks from enjoying life
But misery, that can have a lasting effect on the mind
Certain misfortunes will come our way everyday
Depending on the card you, it may not be your luck
Suffering teaches us to learn and stay away from the pain
It’s a harsh necessary lesson so that we won’t get stuck
And though there are those who relish in the woes
But most of us avoid the torment of a physical agony ...
While needless torment can be just a waste of time
Useless afflictions will numb some folks from enjoying life
But misery, that can have a lasting effect on the mind
Certain misfortunes will come our way everyday
Depending on the card you, it may not be your luck
Suffering teaches us to learn and stay away from the pain
It’s a harsh necessary lesson so that we won’t get stuck
And though there are those who relish in the woes
But most of us avoid the torment of a physical agony ...
#despair
#hope
#suffering
23 reads
1 Comment
PoetSpeak
Poem Published
21st Apr 2024 7:28pm
21st Apr 2024 7:28pm
Safe House
I ran away
From myself
Left all the riches
Took a one bedroom above the drug store
After they close up shop
Can blast my music all night
Maybe put a pick-up on my cello
Abstract the notion of classical
Shredding the strings beyond reason
One day I'll go back
When I've written my opus
I'll stand away from the crowd though
Never going on that fucking Today show
From myself
Left all the riches
Took a one bedroom above the drug store
After they close up shop
Can blast my music all night
Maybe put a pick-up on my cello
Abstract the notion of classical
Shredding the strings beyond reason
One day I'll go back
When I've written my opus
I'll stand away from the crowd though
Never going on that fucking Today show
#despair
#loneliness
#music
#philosophical
#StreamOfConsciousness
95 reads
33 Comments
Sonneteer
L Robinson
L Robinson
Poem Published
21st Apr 2024 4:58pm
21st Apr 2024 4:58pm
Another Year Gone Wrong
Memory’s splinters pain,
chaotic fragments never fuse,
failing to create a self
beyond psychotic illusions and delusions.
A front? A pretense? A maddened dream?
To explain requires some understanding,
but unformed self and wholesome others share such slight overlap
that lack of comprehension is the sole result -
any narrative requires a thread
beyond a desire, a whim, to alter stasis from within.
The chances of success
when isolated, incoherent thoughts of one,
which failed any test of rationality,
possessed ideas of superiority...
chaotic fragments never fuse,
failing to create a self
beyond psychotic illusions and delusions.
A front? A pretense? A maddened dream?
To explain requires some understanding,
but unformed self and wholesome others share such slight overlap
that lack of comprehension is the sole result -
any narrative requires a thread
beyond a desire, a whim, to alter stasis from within.
The chances of success
when isolated, incoherent thoughts of one,
which failed any test of rationality,
possessed ideas of superiority...
#despair
#disappointment
#LifeStruggles
#MentalHealth
#suffering
33 reads
0 Comments
The_Darkness_Insid
Poem Published
21st Apr 2024 1:08pm
21st Apr 2024 1:08pm
Bleeding out
Sitting here as I wait
Not ready to accept my fate
Despair is raining down
No umbrella just the sound
Of silence...so loud its deafening
I feel my heart deadening
Trying to hold on to something that is gone
Devoid of a reason for me to carry on
Surrounded by all the demons of the past
Wondering how much longer can I last
Not ready to accept my fate
Despair is raining down
No umbrella just the sound
Of silence...so loud its deafening
I feel my heart deadening
Trying to hold on to something that is gone
Devoid of a reason for me to carry on
Surrounded by all the demons of the past
Wondering how much longer can I last
#death
#despair
#heartbroken #suicide
#heartbroken #suicide
104 reads
2 Comments
mel44
Melgar
Melgar
Poem Published
19th Apr 2024 6:50pm
19th Apr 2024 6:50pm
Absent the Hunger
I heard the birds
chose not to rise
tears betray
my blurry eyes
Resting here
unable to sleep
unknown reasons
for why I weep
I am not meant
to exist today
how I feel
no words convey
Devoid of senses
empty, numb
no smell or flavour
seems to come
Absent the hunger
deficient desire
without even a start
decision to retire
chose not to rise
tears betray
my blurry eyes
Resting here
unable to sleep
unknown reasons
for why I weep
I am not meant
to exist today
how I feel
no words convey
Devoid of senses
empty, numb
no smell or flavour
seems to come
Absent the hunger
deficient desire
without even a start
decision to retire
#despair
#NaPoWriMo2024
#sadness
55 reads
3 Comments
The_Darkness_Insid
Poem Published
18th Apr 2024 11:59pm
18th Apr 2024 11:59pm
Hope
Where are you now?
I need to find you
And since I am sharing
Im losing my mind too
Dont know why I wake up
My lifes spiraling down
Im missing the one that can turn it around
I pushed you aside
I built up a wall
To protect myself
From the pain of the fall
Are you still there?
Starved from not being fed?
If I tear down this wall would i find you there dead?
I don't deserve it
But could use you right now
The way I treated you
Can you forgive me somehow?
Cuz I'm struggling...
I need to find you
And since I am sharing
Im losing my mind too
Dont know why I wake up
My lifes spiraling down
Im missing the one that can turn it around
I pushed you aside
I built up a wall
To protect myself
From the pain of the fall
Are you still there?
Starved from not being fed?
If I tear down this wall would i find you there dead?
I don't deserve it
But could use you right now
The way I treated you
Can you forgive me somehow?
Cuz I'm struggling...
#depression
#despair
71 reads
4 Comments
Lilliputian
snwlilly
snwlilly
Poem Published
18th Apr 2024 8:19pm
18th Apr 2024 8:19pm
Frozen in Motion
Leaden gray sky weeps
Pitter patter of the rain
A chill wind bites
Lost senses, wandering gaze
People living on
Yet, here, i froze
Imprisoned within
Stuck in a loop
That strangles my breath
Its weight, oh so heavy
Making me break instead
Whispers that hold me down
Ghosts that haunt me down
Lost in my own path
Aching for a light to pierce through
Pitter patter of the rain
A chill wind bites
Lost senses, wandering gaze
People living on
Yet, here, i froze
Imprisoned within
Stuck in a loop
That strangles my breath
Its weight, oh so heavy
Making me break instead
Whispers that hold me down
Ghosts that haunt me down
Lost in my own path
Aching for a light to pierce through
#despair
#FeelingLost
#loneliness
54 reads
1 Comment
BatPowers
Bat Powers
Bat Powers
Poem Published
18th Apr 2024 6:01pm
18th Apr 2024 6:01pm
Seven Times
Some say
we are heading in a very bad direction
time to pack up
need to be moving on
close my eyes
the sun warms my face with reflection
this anger inside
i've got to get it gone
down again
like the other times before
little slower, little grayer
age has no cure
i'm gonna put an application on the other side of that gate
been down seven times
i'll get up eight
our little girl
got sick with the onset of winter ...
we are heading in a very bad direction
time to pack up
need to be moving on
close my eyes
the sun warms my face with reflection
this anger inside
i've got to get it gone
down again
like the other times before
little slower, little grayer
age has no cure
i'm gonna put an application on the other side of that gate
been down seven times
i'll get up eight
our little girl
got sick with the onset of winter ...
#anger
#death
#despair
#hope
#redemption
68 reads
16 Comments
The_Darkness_Insid
Poem Published
18th Apr 2024 5:50pm
18th Apr 2024 5:50pm
Embrace the solitude
Always wanting more and never getting it
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
#breakup
#despair
#heartbroken #loneliness
#heartbroken #loneliness
74 reads
2 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
18th Apr 2024 1:33pm
18th Apr 2024 1:33pm
Skin Hunger
It's so long since I felt your touch.
How do we sleep in the same bed and not even graze each other?
You pushed me away,
With self-deprecating statements.
You tell me you are sorry.
As I suffer from your exile.
Till death we said.
How did we die?
Laying in this bed.
How do we sleep in the same bed and not even graze each other?
You pushed me away,
With self-deprecating statements.
You tell me you are sorry.
As I suffer from your exile.
Till death we said.
How did we die?
Laying in this bed.
#despair
#sadness
58 reads
16 Comments
thoughtsdie
Poem Published
17th Apr 2024 5:58pm
17th Apr 2024 5:58pm
Deafening Scream 6/20/23
We’re all screaming over each other and no one can’t make out their own voices. The suffering is so loud we don’t even realize we’ve gone deaf, because it continues in our heads. Covering the ears only makes the sound clearer, making noise adds to the sound itself. It’s finds a way to make every second of living torture. Deaths whisper calls out in this chaos, a brief moment of relief before it fades out again and I’m stuck here unable to listen. What a fucking tease.
#dark
#death
#despair
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