Collaboration Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#collaboration
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Today 4:47pm
Today 4:47pm
crystalline tears~with the beautiful Indie
Some days I feel like a drowning woman
But everyone thinks I'm waving hello
While I choke on the way
This darkness pulls me under
Sadness dwells with nothing to remedy
No company do I keep
alone in my melancholy
having a personality and soul
My sorrow weeps inside me
With a sweet lullaby
I cry myself to sleep
The tenderness within is hurting
Comfort comes, but it is fleeting
My blue is overwhelming
So I breathe in the black abyss
Hug myself back from the edge
But I alone still can't...
But everyone thinks I'm waving hello
While I choke on the way
This darkness pulls me under
Sadness dwells with nothing to remedy
No company do I keep
alone in my melancholy
having a personality and soul
My sorrow weeps inside me
With a sweet lullaby
I cry myself to sleep
The tenderness within is hurting
Comfort comes, but it is fleeting
My blue is overwhelming
So I breathe in the black abyss
Hug myself back from the edge
But I alone still can't...
#collaboration
#love
#sadness
28 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
4th Apr 2025 11:02am
4th Apr 2025 11:02am
Second Homecoming (Collab with summultima uma)
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with twilight eating eyes
He...
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with twilight eating eyes
He...
#collaboration
#love
#spiritual
147 reads
10 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 9:09pm
2nd Apr 2025 9:09pm
~second homecoming [collab with Vision_of_ insanity (Keith)]
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with...
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with...
#collaboration
#LifeChangingMoment
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
#love
132 reads
7 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
21st Feb 2025 10:37am
21st Feb 2025 10:37am
The Gov't Wants You (Collab with AfterSexDilemma)
You come over and I'll feed you.
Then rape you and tattoo my name on you.
Insert a tracking device and chain you to me.
Register you in the government's cattle tracking system.
Use you for stud services and make lots of money off your sperm donations.
And when you're old, I'll sell all your internal organs for profit.
Scatter your ashes in my garden as fertilizer!
You the consumer are enjoying the taste of cannibalistic delight!
Then rape you and tattoo my name on you.
Insert a tracking device and chain you to me.
Register you in the government's cattle tracking system.
Use you for stud services and make lots of money off your sperm donations.
And when you're old, I'll sell all your internal organs for profit.
Scatter your ashes in my garden as fertilizer!
You the consumer are enjoying the taste of cannibalistic delight!
#collaboration
#corruption
#FeelingTrapped
#greed
#sacrifice
125 reads
17 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
8th Feb 2025 8:47pm
8th Feb 2025 8:47pm
Limp Sound Display (collaboration with PAR)
Unwind the clock
there far beyond the beyond
where there is no one else
the world's on fire
on the waters he walks
humanity also walks...
passing the time with song
humming happy thoughts
Mouse falls into a trap
volcanoes explode islands
birds in my tree
birds destroy their nests
a rainy day, wash the hate away
like seahorse cowboys
singing their song
mushroom clouds dissipate
strawberries mean love
Let your body go with the wind
let your body free from your mind
Find the stairway at the...
there far beyond the beyond
where there is no one else
the world's on fire
on the waters he walks
humanity also walks...
passing the time with song
humming happy thoughts
Mouse falls into a trap
volcanoes explode islands
birds in my tree
birds destroy their nests
a rainy day, wash the hate away
like seahorse cowboys
singing their song
mushroom clouds dissipate
strawberries mean love
Let your body go with the wind
let your body free from your mind
Find the stairway at the...
#admiration
#art
#collaboration
#dreams
#utopia
133 reads
12 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
8th Feb 2025 3:45pm
8th Feb 2025 3:45pm
Limp Sound Display (Collaboration with Vision_of_insanity)
Unwind the clock
there far beyond the beyond
where there is no one else
the world's on fire
on the waters he walks
humanity also walks...
passing the time with song
humming happy thoughts
Mouse falls into a trap
volcanoes explode islands
birds in my tree
birds destroy their nests
a rainy day, wash the hate away
like seahorse cowboys
singing their song
mushroom clouds dissipate
strawberries mean love
Let your body go with the wind
let your body free from your mind
Find...
there far beyond the beyond
where there is no one else
the world's on fire
on the waters he walks
humanity also walks...
passing the time with song
humming happy thoughts
Mouse falls into a trap
volcanoes explode islands
birds in my tree
birds destroy their nests
a rainy day, wash the hate away
like seahorse cowboys
singing their song
mushroom clouds dissipate
strawberries mean love
Let your body go with the wind
let your body free from your mind
Find...
#admiration
#art
#collaboration
#funny
#respect
126 reads
10 Comments
Nizana
Lauryn
Lauryn
Poem Published
4th Feb 2025 1:04pm
4th Feb 2025 1:04pm
The Dish and the Spoon - with Adagio
It was twilight in a small town in New Mexico. I breathed deep, walking home after closing my bookshop for the night. Taking a shortcut path approaching the cul-de-sac, I felt the silence creeping up my spine. As a long-time advocate for the unbridled pleasures and misdemeanors, I obsessed quietly on "The Cat and the Fiddle," as curiosity tickled my flesh. I was obsessed with the silhouette-like movement behind curtains of the homes as I passed.
As I walked, I turned into a child and the neighborhood became the one I grew up in. The night was quiet and cold. I walked...
As I walked, I turned into a child and the neighborhood became the one I grew up in. The night was quiet and cold. I walked...
#childhood
#collaboration
#erotic #nightmares
#erotic #nightmares
246 reads
2 Comments
Nizana
Lauryn
Lauryn
Poem Published
29th Jan 2025 1:20pm
29th Jan 2025 1:20pm
Fountain Eyes - with Adagio
intoxicated green fountain eyes
flowing ecstasy of love's passion
untouched in the hollow chambers
of grave beyond infinity in rituals
resting your soul in death's cradle
the author's heart, once fervent and keen
now silent and still, prayers unanswered
all succumb to the endless sleep
the quill falls from lifeless fingers
words once dancing now lie silent
but in the inkwell, dry and spent, there is a rising
hardened pens still trace green fountain eyes
but the silence is deep as memories sleep ...
flowing ecstasy of love's passion
untouched in the hollow chambers
of grave beyond infinity in rituals
resting your soul in death's cradle
the author's heart, once fervent and keen
now silent and still, prayers unanswered
all succumb to the endless sleep
the quill falls from lifeless fingers
words once dancing now lie silent
but in the inkwell, dry and spent, there is a rising
hardened pens still trace green fountain eyes
but the silence is deep as memories sleep ...
#collaboration
#dark
#erotic
196 reads
2 Comments
MySmile
Besma
Besma
Poem Published
19th Jan 2025 10:13pm
19th Jan 2025 10:13pm
A Throbbing Scent - with adagio
Pale lips of blue perishable breath
Silence without cliches, listening,
Stuck upon a memory that you are
Blossoming in death’s trite without
Critique in my slumber as I sleep
***
Stirred is the mind by a throbbing scent
Soul refilled straying off an end
A warm love unearthed now blooming
So soft the sound of a seed life sipping
Silence just retreated while smiling..
Silence without cliches, listening,
Stuck upon a memory that you are
Blossoming in death’s trite without
Critique in my slumber as I sleep
***
Stirred is the mind by a throbbing scent
Soul refilled straying off an end
A warm love unearthed now blooming
So soft the sound of a seed life sipping
Silence just retreated while smiling..
#collaboration
#rebirth
#spiritual
104 reads
6 Comments
MySmile
Besma
Besma
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 9:49pm
18th Jan 2025 9:49pm
Legos In Translation (a collaboration with adagio)
Oceans of green through the window of eyes
And the blueprints of nature’s serenity
Through the hourglass of autumn’s compose
In fields of Elysian verdant wildflowers
And nature’s Pandora Jack-in-the-Box of
Folded memories and Legos in translation
*****
So lofty are mountains turned tender
When soothed by the warm hands of the sun
Against the harsh white winter a defender
Nature’s bounty would ever humankind stun
To every single season weather and surrender
Then bare your treasure into verses second to none..
And the blueprints of nature’s serenity
Through the hourglass of autumn’s compose
In fields of Elysian verdant wildflowers
And nature’s Pandora Jack-in-the-Box of
Folded memories and Legos in translation
*****
So lofty are mountains turned tender
When soothed by the warm hands of the sun
Against the harsh white winter a defender
Nature’s bounty would ever humankind stun
To every single season weather and surrender
Then bare your treasure into verses second to none..
#collaboration
#fall
#nature #winter
#nature #winter
105 reads
4 Comments
moon_bather
Poem Published
1st Dec 2024 7:13am
1st Dec 2024 7:13am
Refrained
(Moon_bather/Fia Naturie collab)
I got this to say
You don’t know me anyway
I got this to say
What the fuck you trying to say
How many fingers you got
Not enough to make you stop
How many minds can bleed
Until you stop your fucking seed
Hello 911, She’s going to need help please
What is your emergency
The world, and what she believes
Excuse me?
I want to leave and go away
Are you being detained in any way
She has locked me in chain, making me stay
I’ll send...
I got this to say
You don’t know me anyway
I got this to say
What the fuck you trying to say
How many fingers you got
Not enough to make you stop
How many minds can bleed
Until you stop your fucking seed
Hello 911, She’s going to need help please
What is your emergency
The world, and what she believes
Excuse me?
I want to leave and go away
Are you being detained in any way
She has locked me in chain, making me stay
I’ll send...
#collaboration
#FreeVerse
#rhyming #StreamOfConsciousness
#rhyming #StreamOfConsciousness
145 reads
5 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
20th Nov 2024 3:47pm
20th Nov 2024 3:47pm
unperceived in the ominous woods~with the talented Sage_6_paths_light
the darkness beckons
and I come forth willingly, into the unknown
sensing something forbodeing, I draw back to the shadows
the trees are silent it's eerie
forsake the angels
it's a spell their under
I've always been friend to the trees
today they loom large
the forest smells of copper pennies
an unmistakable tang
withdrawing further, a tree warns
a madman is afoot
with wild eyes and smile that chills
my blood runs cold, as I catch sight of him
Bloodlust in the air
Hard to breath my thoughts...
and I come forth willingly, into the unknown
sensing something forbodeing, I draw back to the shadows
the trees are silent it's eerie
forsake the angels
it's a spell their under
I've always been friend to the trees
today they loom large
the forest smells of copper pennies
an unmistakable tang
withdrawing further, a tree warns
a madman is afoot
with wild eyes and smile that chills
my blood runs cold, as I catch sight of him
Bloodlust in the air
Hard to breath my thoughts...
#collaboration
#dark
121 reads
0 Comments
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