Poems About Life Struggles Seeking Honest Critique
#LifeStruggles
Poems about life struggles seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
NP_NP
Poem Published
1st Jan 2025 7:04pm
1st Jan 2025 7:04pm
Drain
You say it again, “You don’t love me,”
etching it into existence, carving it into stone.
The wall I once thought I had torn down,
you build it anew, brick by brick,
fortifying the distance between us.
We were once so steady, so alive with laughter,
but the light in your eyes flickers and fades.
Should I stay? I wonder,
as you drain my spirit,
leaving me hollow, weary from the fight.
It feels as though you thrive on breaking me,
pulling strength from my exhaustion.
I beg you to stop—
I don’t want to fight anymore, ...
etching it into existence, carving it into stone.
The wall I once thought I had torn down,
you build it anew, brick by brick,
fortifying the distance between us.
We were once so steady, so alive with laughter,
but the light in your eyes flickers and fades.
Should I stay? I wonder,
as you drain my spirit,
leaving me hollow, weary from the fight.
It feels as though you thrive on breaking me,
pulling strength from my exhaustion.
I beg you to stop—
I don’t want to fight anymore, ...
#anxiety
#dark
#LifeStruggles
#sadness
#suffering
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Kementic1
Poem Published
31st Dec 2024 6:37pm
31st Dec 2024 6:37pm
A Coronation
A 170 Million Dollar Scheme
A thin skinned con man's wet dream
With Sycophants that will kiss his ring and @ss
while dining on Pheasant under glass
There will be bowing and boot licking
while plotting against the left and on them tricking
Men in tux's and women in ball gowns
waiting for 1/21st for Trump to release the hounds
The 1% will celebrate in this way
awaiting another big payday
The poor and middle class
will wait to see which programs DOGE will slash
On...
A thin skinned con man's wet dream
With Sycophants that will kiss his ring and @ss
while dining on Pheasant under glass
There will be bowing and boot licking
while plotting against the left and on them tricking
Men in tux's and women in ball gowns
waiting for 1/21st for Trump to release the hounds
The 1% will celebrate in this way
awaiting another big payday
The poor and middle class
will wait to see which programs DOGE will slash
On...
#corruption
#inequality
#LifeStruggles
#politics
#power
150 reads
1 Comment
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
29th Dec 2024 5:50am
29th Dec 2024 5:50am
The walk home...
There's a cool breeze...
chilling me to the bone...
it's gonna rain tonight...
I'm walking home cause -
I've only pennies in my pocket.
I just want my lumpy bed.
Severe weather just ahead.
I know the way all too well.
I've walked these streets...
...for a long long time...
to just the edge of the ghetto -
at the start of rampant crime!
I'll sleep good tonight...
If I make it home.
I've got a pack of ramen...
and some cheese crackers...
waiting home patiently...for me.
...where i wanna be... ...
chilling me to the bone...
it's gonna rain tonight...
I'm walking home cause -
I've only pennies in my pocket.
I just want my lumpy bed.
Severe weather just ahead.
I know the way all too well.
I've walked these streets...
...for a long long time...
to just the edge of the ghetto -
at the start of rampant crime!
I'll sleep good tonight...
If I make it home.
I've got a pack of ramen...
and some cheese crackers...
waiting home patiently...for me.
...where i wanna be... ...
#anxiety
#LifeStruggles
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5 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
27th Dec 2024 12:19pm
27th Dec 2024 12:19pm
In Death's Shoes
Everything has meaning
Everything is meaningful
Everything is meaningless
Everything is mean
It all makes sense
It's all bullshit
Death fucks love in the neck
Death makes me see the end
At the beginning of everything
Death makes me want to sleep
Death is a relief
Death is a release
Death is my master and inspiration
A good boss
A good reason to live
A great reason to die
Death is the only thing I know
That doesn't need an excuse
Death doesn't lie
Death is an equal opportunity destroyer
Carpe...
Everything is meaningful
Everything is meaningless
Everything is mean
It all makes sense
It's all bullshit
Death fucks love in the neck
Death makes me see the end
At the beginning of everything
Death makes me want to sleep
Death is a relief
Death is a release
Death is my master and inspiration
A good boss
A good reason to live
A great reason to die
Death is the only thing I know
That doesn't need an excuse
Death doesn't lie
Death is an equal opportunity destroyer
Carpe...
#dark
#death
#LifeStruggles #philosophical
#LifeStruggles #philosophical
84 reads
14 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
26th Dec 2024 3:28am
26th Dec 2024 3:28am
When the tears fall silently
For sure through the process of life someone else, may walk into your life, 💕 leaving an impressive place in your own thoughts. Wondering if this is the one with insight and a spiritual soul of there heart. 💖 FOR sure it's gonna make you smile, yet you wonder could this be really real, or just more of the same mind games 😤 that so many still like to play. 🤔 To leave you alone and broken, like a shattered glass of broken pieces, 😭 THAT will never heal as those memories of the past, behind you have you feeling trap in ways that becomes, completely...
#FeelingLost
#FeelingTrapped
#LifeStruggles
#StreamOfConsciousness
#uplifting
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fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
24th Dec 2024 1:21am
24th Dec 2024 1:21am
Sessions Part 1
Memory distorts
Memory heals
Memory contorts
Memory steals
Not all memories comforts
The whole morning went by in a blur. The two couples I had sessions with had been challenging lately. Whenever I felt that they have moved forward on a particular topic, one of them would bring up something from the past that reverts the whole situation backward. ...
Memory heals
Memory contorts
Memory steals
Not all memories comforts
The whole morning went by in a blur. The two couples I had sessions with had been challenging lately. Whenever I felt that they have moved forward on a particular topic, one of them would bring up something from the past that reverts the whole situation backward. ...
#LifeStruggles
#vulnerability
164 reads
6 Comments
Kementic1
Poem Published
22nd Dec 2024 11:23pm
22nd Dec 2024 11:23pm
Never Goes Out Of Style
In America when it comes to fashion there is always a change
and clothes come in a wide price range
sometimes dresses, and sweaters have suede or leather patches
made in china in large batches
there are an infinite number of accessories
that shine like lights on Christmas trees
but, when comes to race, folks walk around with a phony smile
with hate in their hearts-that never goes out of style
and clothes come in a wide price range
sometimes dresses, and sweaters have suede or leather patches
made in china in large batches
there are an infinite number of accessories
that shine like lights on Christmas trees
but, when comes to race, folks walk around with a phony smile
with hate in their hearts-that never goes out of style
#HumanRights
#inequality
#LifeStruggles
#oppression
#racism
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MalcolmG
Poem Published
21st Dec 2024 1:12pm
21st Dec 2024 1:12pm
The Honeyed Quest in haiku
Whispers on the breeze
a meadow’s heart starts fading,
nectar crown grows dim.
Golden fields tremble,
petals bow to coming drought,
bees hum tales of fear.
Small Melis takes flight,
a spark against looming dusk,
her heart pure as light.
Through the grand forest’s shade,
ants hoard crystals sharp as glass
she gifts royal gold.
Sap glows soft and sweet,
they share a feast, unity
woven in their dance.
The lilies’ mirror,
rippling fears in darkened waves
“Small, yet I am strong.” ...
a meadow’s heart starts fading,
nectar crown grows dim.
Golden fields tremble,
petals bow to coming drought,
bees hum tales of fear.
Small Melis takes flight,
a spark against looming dusk,
her heart pure as light.
Through the grand forest’s shade,
ants hoard crystals sharp as glass
she gifts royal gold.
Sap glows soft and sweet,
they share a feast, unity
woven in their dance.
The lilies’ mirror,
rippling fears in darkened waves
“Small, yet I am strong.” ...
#happiness
#LifeStruggles
#nature
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
21st Dec 2024 11:55am
21st Dec 2024 11:55am
Riding the current
There's no night like tonight
They're all different
I went out there
I could taste the air
The power lines buzzing
I became part of the current
Like I knew exactly what was supposed to happen
So when the pig ran the stop sign and nearly ran my ass over,
my heart didn't skip once
I watch the man across the street watch me
He's plugged in too
We're both riding the current
It's not paranoia
It's just being on
Connected by the eyes
The eyes flash like knives
In the 7-11
I watch the man behind the counter ...
They're all different
I went out there
I could taste the air
The power lines buzzing
I became part of the current
Like I knew exactly what was supposed to happen
So when the pig ran the stop sign and nearly ran my ass over,
my heart didn't skip once
I watch the man across the street watch me
He's plugged in too
We're both riding the current
It's not paranoia
It's just being on
Connected by the eyes
The eyes flash like knives
In the 7-11
I watch the man behind the counter ...
#city
#LifeStruggles
#night
#ShortStory
#TruthOfLife
82 reads
6 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
20th Dec 2024 11:09am
20th Dec 2024 11:09am
Lifetime
Life neither remembers nor forgets
It is valueless to itself
It doesn't care about you
Don't you see how easily it leaves the room when you need it during those trying times?
It is valueless to itself
It doesn't care about you
Don't you see how easily it leaves the room when you need it during those trying times?
#LifeStruggles
#morality
#support
90 reads
9 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
18th Dec 2024 12:59pm
18th Dec 2024 12:59pm
Blindness Of The Eyed Ones
It's so easy to write more words
vanity and levity, that say less
much the same when you talk too much
while your speech is meaningless
even at more lower level when you lie
in this mature age and awareness...............
when the child lies we blame the kid
scald him sometimes, hurt his feelings
don't we realize that they are our seed
Then, we reject the crops that we have sown
shameful when the child read our sickness,
see our vulnerability, watch how weak
we present our poetic selves....
vanity and levity, that say less
much the same when you talk too much
while your speech is meaningless
even at more lower level when you lie
in this mature age and awareness...............
when the child lies we blame the kid
scald him sometimes, hurt his feelings
don't we realize that they are our seed
Then, we reject the crops that we have sown
shameful when the child read our sickness,
see our vulnerability, watch how weak
we present our poetic selves....
#corruption
#deception
#inequality
#LifeStruggles
#vulnerability
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DamianDeadLove
Poem Published
18th Dec 2024 6:53am
18th Dec 2024 6:53am
Sinking Down
A jack of all trades and a master of none
Isn’t that what you told me when you were young?
So many restless nights avoiding the sun
Careless whispers spoken with a poison tongue
Sinking down with the lowest of lows
Words are subtle jabs leading to blows
Never throw stones inside this fragile house
When did you stop listening to such sound advice?
An alley cat stalks the unsuspecting mouse
Playing life’s game costs us more than what’s suffice
Sinking down until insanity seizes control
Lies are a cancer that slowly kills...
Isn’t that what you told me when you were young?
So many restless nights avoiding the sun
Careless whispers spoken with a poison tongue
Sinking down with the lowest of lows
Words are subtle jabs leading to blows
Never throw stones inside this fragile house
When did you stop listening to such sound advice?
An alley cat stalks the unsuspecting mouse
Playing life’s game costs us more than what’s suffice
Sinking down until insanity seizes control
Lies are a cancer that slowly kills...
#LifeStruggles
129 reads
21 Comments
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