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Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
Fantastic colors
Signals the death Nell.
My spirit fell
As explosions in the sky
Reach a devastating crescendo.
Rich with radiation
And the metallic taste of uranium.
Lost in a orgy of deathly innuendo.
Familiar streaks
Lie Underneath clockwork feet.
Aching bones re tract
As skeletons
fry under a electric sky.
Lost underwater
The last bearded Urban survivor
The sky turns to neon
Just when i need
Someone to lean on.
It was a good life
Packed with excitement,
But strife
No regrets fill this abyss
Of refection
Except one exception.
The space between us
Was far to long.
I guess in more ways
Then one
We did it to ourselfs.
To lost
To weak
Put your arms around me
I don't want to die tonight.
Signals the death Nell.
My spirit fell
As explosions in the sky
Reach a devastating crescendo.
Rich with radiation
And the metallic taste of uranium.
Lost in a orgy of deathly innuendo.
Familiar streaks
Lie Underneath clockwork feet.
Aching bones re tract
As skeletons
fry under a electric sky.
Lost underwater
The last bearded Urban survivor
The sky turns to neon
Just when i need
Someone to lean on.
It was a good life
Packed with excitement,
But strife
No regrets fill this abyss
Of refection
Except one exception.
The space between us
Was far to long.
I guess in more ways
Then one
We did it to ourselfs.
To lost
To weak
Put your arms around me
I don't want to die tonight.
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Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
29th Mar 2013 10:28pm
"The space between us was far too long" even when standing next to each other it can feel that way.
Great write Marcus, one to ponder. :)
Great write Marcus, one to ponder. :)
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
29th Mar 2013 10:30pm
Exactly dieing from nuclear fall out and a broken heart not sure which is worse. i wrote this for a comp but i cant remember which on lol
marcus
marcus
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
29th Mar 2013 11:40pm
Goodness Marcus! Wow!!
This is Magnificent!
I'd take a nuclear bomb(quick death) any day of the week, over a broken heart! <--those take forever to heal, a slow death!
I can not express how beautifully you've penned this! Love It! xo
This is Magnificent!
I'd take a nuclear bomb(quick death) any day of the week, over a broken heart! <--those take forever to heal, a slow death!
I can not express how beautifully you've penned this! Love It! xo
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
30th Mar 2013 00:20am
Hi many thanks rain i agree i would take a bomb blast any day, a broken heart is the worse pain of all,
Many thanks
marcus
Many thanks
marcus
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
30th Mar 2013 3:49am
Marcus, I really like the vivid images in the first two stanzas, the flow of language and the stark honesty of the piece. Nice job!
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
30th Mar 2013 10:49am
Cheers tony
It was quite the spare of the moment poem
glad you enjoyed
marcus
It was quite the spare of the moment poem
glad you enjoyed
marcus
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
Anonymous
30th Mar 2013 7:54am
Excellent Marcus
strider.....pondering
strider.....pondering
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
30th Mar 2013 10:50am
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
Anonymous
31st Mar 2013 8:59pm
This is a great write, Marcus, psychedelic write.
very visual lines, enjoyed the read!!!
very visual lines, enjoyed the read!!!
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
1st Apr 2013 00:51am
Many thanks i guess it does have that psycadelic quality to it
many thanks for reading
Marcus
many thanks for reading
Marcus
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
3rd Apr 2013 9:12am
I enjoyed this, it has a good flow
and interesting subject matter.
Aching bones re tract
As skeletons
fry under a electric sky.
Lost underwater
The last bearded Urban survivor
The sky turns to neon
Just when i need
Someone to lean on.
very well written,
Scribbler
and interesting subject matter.
Aching bones re tract
As skeletons
fry under a electric sky.
Lost underwater
The last bearded Urban survivor
The sky turns to neon
Just when i need
Someone to lean on.
very well written,
Scribbler
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
3rd Apr 2013 6:24pm
Many thanks scribbler, it was quite a bizzare write, i remember writing this on a park bench, its amazing what a simple act can inspire.
Many thanks for reading
Marcus
Many thanks for reading
Marcus
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
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4th Apr 2013 00:42am
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
4th Apr 2013 11:25am
Many thanks my friend at the end of the world we all need someone to lean on.
cheers
Marcus
cheers
Marcus
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
5th Apr 2013 00:24am
Good Words, quite apocalyptic in fact ... There by grace of god we stand .. upon the beach
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
5th Apr 2013 8:58am
Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
5th Apr 2013 00:37am
That has been in the top 5 I've read on here! So close to the end, you're right! Awesome visuals!
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re: Re: Post - Apocalyptic Hopscotch
5th Apr 2013 8:59am
Many thanks sasha, that means a lot
Cheers For reading and good to have you on board
Marcus
Cheers For reading and good to have you on board
Marcus