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The preciousness of preciousness.
I never had the chance to tell you,
well, I had so many chances to tell you
but you're not one for deep sentiments,
you just like deep holes and deep intellects but;
I knew this would come, in between the morning
crows of here and the nights clouds of your roof
I saw the wandering gaze of someone who wasn't lost,
but realised they wanted to be and there I was, ready to be the cement
that gave you footing and a foundation, when I should have just given
you more fuel to burn away any attachments to this place.
So I guess, if any regrets I have, if I am to feel it;
that I didn't give up something precious
to preserve the preciousness
of you any sooner.
She wrote it in cursive
with a 2b pencil
on a crisp white sheet
stained with eraser marks
torn out from a moleskin notepad
and i found it
in my suitcase
two months later
after her funeral.
well, I had so many chances to tell you
but you're not one for deep sentiments,
you just like deep holes and deep intellects but;
I knew this would come, in between the morning
crows of here and the nights clouds of your roof
I saw the wandering gaze of someone who wasn't lost,
but realised they wanted to be and there I was, ready to be the cement
that gave you footing and a foundation, when I should have just given
you more fuel to burn away any attachments to this place.
So I guess, if any regrets I have, if I am to feel it;
that I didn't give up something precious
to preserve the preciousness
of you any sooner.
She wrote it in cursive
with a 2b pencil
on a crisp white sheet
stained with eraser marks
torn out from a moleskin notepad
and i found it
in my suitcase
two months later
after her funeral.
Published 28th Mar 2013
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28th Mar 2013 2:05am
Your focus, structure, and context are all impressing the hell out of me at the moment Will. I think I shall take this to bed, and dream on it.
Beautiful read :)
Beautiful read :)
28th Mar 2013 2:05am
Anonymous
28th Mar 2013 3:04am
Amazing depth to your write, conjures then sustains an emotional bond throughout
well penned
well penned
Anonymous
28th Mar 2013 10:36am
The way that this is split into two stanzas almost refelcts the past and the present. In terms of form, this works very well.
I have a bit of a love affair with the new pages of notebooks, and the descriptions of fresh pencils on clean pages really appeals to my senses. Ripping the page from a new book - an apt metaphor for death.
One niggle - how come you have capitlised your I's in the first stanza, but not the second? Was this intentional?
Language is beautiful also. Thank you for the read.
I have a bit of a love affair with the new pages of notebooks, and the descriptions of fresh pencils on clean pages really appeals to my senses. Ripping the page from a new book - an apt metaphor for death.
One niggle - how come you have capitlised your I's in the first stanza, but not the second? Was this intentional?
Language is beautiful also. Thank you for the read.
5th Apr 2013 8:43am
Your really good, I'm a writer to I would love to see your works continue.:)
