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Silence of Hard Men
Cruel. Hard. Loved to paint. Can it be?
Can a man be so hard and apathetic
and paint such an astonishing tiger?
I remember the big mustache, no lips,
some hard creased up eyes
that looked like screams in a hurricane
and a pipe.
Skin loose and oily, like baking paper.
Been told a hundred stories; didn't seem the type
to have many friends. Hands made for bricks,
bricks made for him. A god of bricks - great boxer.
Hands were made for what a man's should be.
Killed black men in Africa
with a gun, and maybe something else.
They had something else. He had six kids
and none of them held him with any endearment
but they respected him, respect his memory.
Six kids, and probably didn't know
it's as natural for a child to dance
as it is to breathe.
Cruel. Hard. Loved to paint. It's often the best way,
I know that. Your kids and wife don't.
I remember play-fighting in your living room
and I bit your hand. Blood was red.
I felt bad. Felt bad for a kind, old man.
Written by
MrAlptraum
(Mr A)
Published 25th Mar 2013
| Edited 26th Mar 2013
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Re: Silence of Hard Men
25th Mar 2013 5:09pm
this is an interesting piece, not sure what to make of it at the moment. Very thoughtful.
Caliban
Caliban
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It's simple, kinda. It's about my granddad. Not the nicest piece in the eyes of poetry.
Thanks for your thoughts, Miss Always.
Thanks for your thoughts, Miss Always.
Re: Silence of Hard Men
25th Mar 2013 5:17pm
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25th Mar 2013 7:37pm
Re: Silence of Hard Men
25th Mar 2013 5:22pm
An intriguing poem, and I'm interested in what hasn't been said here, as well as what has been.
"Killed black men in Africa
with a gun, and maybe something else.
They had something else."
"Killed black men in Africa
with a gun, and maybe something else.
They had something else."
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re: Re: Silence of Hard Men
25th Mar 2013 7:39pm
Well, that's for you to speculate on. History narrows that bit down slightly. Thank you, Atakti.
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25th Mar 2013 5:25pm
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25th Mar 2013 7:41pm
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25th Mar 2013 6:34pm
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25th Mar 2013 7:43pm
Good on your dad. :) most men were. Things change, leaving us with emos and self-harm.
Someone shut me up. Thanks, Mags.
Someone shut me up. Thanks, Mags.
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26th Mar 2013 2:33am
"Things change, leaving us with emos and self-harm"
This is a clear statement that (for me) explains what I see goin' on.
Thanks.
This is a clear statement that (for me) explains what I see goin' on.
Thanks.
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Anonymous
25th Mar 2013 7:41pm
I like this one, makes some interesting points- like, how someone who seems so insensitive can be a great painter, how often the ones closest to us understand us the least, and how differently people in general were taught to behave and what was appropriate behaviour for others..a lot in this one..well penned.

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re: Re: Silence of Hard Men
25th Mar 2013 7:50pm
Re: Silence of Hard Men
Anonymous
26th Mar 2013 11:46am
You need to put spaces on either side of the dash in this line, otherwise it seems like you're making "bricks" and "great" two halves of the same word: "A god of bricks-great boxer".
An excellent character study; rich and poignant. It's not especially dark or light, just honest. There's a purity to the portrait which gives it power. The differentiation between respect and endearment in verse four shows a lot of insight, as does the very last line. Thank you for the read.
An excellent character study; rich and poignant. It's not especially dark or light, just honest. There's a purity to the portrait which gives it power. The differentiation between respect and endearment in verse four shows a lot of insight, as does the very last line. Thank you for the read.

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re: Re: Silence of Hard Men
26th Mar 2013 12:16pm
Fuck me. :) never even noticed. Cheers.
Glad you read that how you did. Must mean I did something right. Again cheers, Jack.
Glad you read that how you did. Must mean I did something right. Again cheers, Jack.